The poems fine but unless you're gay avoid refering to your dick as your cock in poetry. It makes you sound gay.

Wrote this in MS Word huh?

Just for the record, I absolutely fucking hate this...it's cheezy and cliche...there are a few things I like about it, though..it's something of an experiment.

The bulemia bit is bad...the rest I like.

Send this to Garth Brooks, he'll make you rich.

This one's very experimental. Here's your hint, the first line is "Wildman".

http://www.gnosis.org/library/marygosp.htm My Christmas gift to you Dovina.

After reading the comments below, Ive been looking for all sorts of hidden patterns... but nothing so far, otherwise it seems kind of like good ole hoe-down.

Did you notice every line in your poem is written as a seperate sentence. Caps at the beginning. MS Word? You need to get personal. Say things that are unique to your situation or perspective. We have no idea who the hell you're talking to. A lover? A friend? A man? A woman? Michael Jackson? Who? Don't try to write a poem for everyone. If you do it will always turn out the same way. Hokey.

final stanza definately needs punctuation or something, I though I was reading a Yoda-ism. like the idea of a bouquet of bones.

The third line had me confused, until I finally realized on the fourth read that you meant "an old one-speed". Violent dreams. Guns never appear in my dreams. Instead, people point their fingers and say BANG. Then the bad thing falls over.

If I could impeach an angry bush... Love it. 10 for the politics alone.

"grey that’s been wearing down his soul" is good. No it's bad. Same for "kiss from old scars and lullabies."

Yeah, you have to wonder if you're really going to be able to convey your feelings and experiences and make an accurate account of your life and times if you can only write 13-syllable sentences...

The last line's good; the first 8 don't make words do anything they haven't done for six hundred years at least.

Stanzas 1, 3, and 5 are really great. Stanza 4 is passable. I would drop everything else and maybe add a new, underwrought closing stanza. And change the title, too. Not bad, not bad at all...

Clever. I'm not sure I got lines 4 and 5, but what I think I got I like.

meloncholy in a mellow way.

Wild man, bled in my vanities; My graven ancient, increase mass homicide. So little left of you to resurrect for you. Wild man God interred his head. I dunno...best I could come up with. 9 for making me think...I'd give you a 10 but you made me think and that pissed me off. ;)

Your honor, St. Peter. I bring you exhibit A: Silent Night by Dovina. The prosecution now rests it's case. "Wholly night" as in completely night is a weak line. Even Dan Brown would be walking on eggshells around this one. Your showing some guts and that gets you a "You go girl" from me.