bazaar, urchin, clavicle, deadwood, bull's-eye, hobnailed, obsequious, argyle, newsprint, sunstruck, klar(I have no idea what that means), and buoy. Didn't Ginsberg used to do things like that, like cutting out newspaper articles for inspiration?

Am I the first for this? It very good. You have some good stuff in you.

Very good. Anvil eyed needs a hyphen or the anvil is doing the eying. Davy lamp doesn't need quotation marks, and is a much more relevant and precise image than hero's sword. The details give it pathos and I think it benefits from not being overloaded with adjectives.

boy, i sure do wish someone would bestow their intelligent advice upon me as to how i could improve this poem...

Not quite sure about the capital F in the first "Fire". If "More than you can shake a stick at" was something he said alot (which is just my hunch) then put it in quotations please. I thought it was a great sentiment and quite deep. Well expressed D.

The rhyme in the middle is good but it makes that section sweep by much faster than the rest; if I were you I'd keep a constant speed with this piece as it isn't particularly long. Other than that, very good!

That's very nice, I like it!

Story of my fucking life.

Lines 13, 14, 15, 16 aren't as good as the rest of it - they're very ordinary whereas the rest is nicely eloquent. I loved the first 4 lines. Excellent rhythm and the rhyme holds up pretty well.

Changed line 3 to davy lamp as it makes a wheezing sound when lit and is used for mining. I think its better than heroes sword.

Fuck a duck this so favourited.

Reminds me of Ginsberg's supermarket minus the poet comparisons.

Imago and Poe must be a couple of your favorites.

I like the Judas tree reference. The name derives from the tradition that Judas Iscariot hanged himself from this tree, and when it's in bloom, it blushes with shame every year.

Confessions done more out of spite than shame is really apt, and using it again with pain is all right too. I could do without the enumeration list at the end. Good work.

Very Raymond Chandler. 'The bartender,......, is talking up'... You really need those commas there. she licks her lips, explores the green oval with her tongue before slipping it into her mouth. the word 'doppler' conjures 'weather-guy' pretty well by it's self. I think it might be better to use a meteorologists actual name. After 'I already know...' at the end, the following line just kind of lies there. What did you win?

'Existential'. I don't get as much from this as I usually do from your poetry, still well-written...but you often do better.

Very good, not original but done much better than most. The only suggestion I have is to change 'started' (line 8) to 'begun'...it's easier to read, other than that - excellent!

Welcome back! I like the beginning a lot--you get right to it. Good details too. Maybe consider dropping one of the "more out of spite than shame" (I don't know that it needs repeating) and the "gone but not forgotten," which may be too familiar a phrase? The countdown at the end is a nice touch.

i read the long poem of how mom trys to ruin u on poem ranker, what is that. Is it true? i hope not that would be mal. i lo v loved you cause you were my teacher and i the squire. this sucks i hope your a liar. i came out the hospital, a couple months ago in hawaii now im in california again. i od on ice, now i just live life in a criogenic dream im sorry but please tell me the truth of the matter when me and mom lived there. i missed you, i want to miss you again.