This is sweet. I would delete the word "me" almost every time it appears, though.

Beautiful, one too many 'loves' though, maybe replace the second one with something else. Other than that, I'm not going to complain about something as sweet as this.

I wonder, if I was to change the first line to a stanza: "They tell me that I can't hear anymore. And I think, how silly; Can't they see that, lately, Everyone has grown cat feet."

Hmmm, not bad. It's got a sing song feel to it. And you've put it as free verse. OOps sorry. Looks like ecargo out did me in my comment. This is a common theme, but when well written, it's worth a read, and you've brought out something in it. Good work.

Cool stuff, I thought the first line of stanza 2 was a bit unoriginal and didn't quite fit with the rest of that stanza. I like the rhyme scheme and the quick rhythm of it. 'My mind cannot fathom even in post-graduate fashion' is a smart line. I actually think the last stanza might just about hold up...but ecargo is right that it doesn't sound right when read.

'Her saddest smile...' got me going, I feel there's more waiting to be said from there. However, I also think it would spoil the swift beauty of this one. I really like the brevity of it, although I'm not convinced by the first two lines. Still a very pleasant read.

Smoothly done, violent like a game. The imagery is very strong (as with most of your stuff, come to think of it!)

Niphredil got it spot on by suggesting you don't repeat words (not so soon, anyway). I also found it interesting that the first stanza could be put directly in front of the last, and with the addition of a little punctuation it would work nicely. I'd love to see if you could apply this to the whole poem; work it so that any stanza could lead straight into any other. I found the line breaks a little disruptive, but that could easily just be my way of reading it.

Blake.

I would only change "You make my day" to something a little more original. Otherwise, it's happy and very sweet. I'm glad you're experimenting with different types of poetry!

I completely missed the deafness in here, i was thinking of people being deliberately quiet so as not to disturb someone who they think is asleep (maybe terminal in a hospital). It's a good poem without the explanation, but it's a super poem with it.

Your a southern girl so procrastination is in your blood. I have no excuse for why I procrastinate. If only I were a pothead.

Wow! An enjoyable read!

This is nice but the use of "cat feet" constantly reminds me of the Carl Sandburg poem "Fog" Fog The fog comes on little cat feet. It sits looking over harbor and city on silent haunches and then moves on.

This is top stuff, although I had to read it twice. I could tell it was a upbeat poem, but it could very easily have the complete opposite meaning (relating in particular to a friend of mine, otherwise I probably wouldn't have seen a darker side to it) and I thought it a shame to give such a negative reading to a great piece like this =D

drnick and ecargo.... I hope you find this a good change. Enjoy!

Cool!

I think I liked your 'fishy' poem better. This seems a bit disconnected on the whole and I wasn't really impressed compared to quite a few writes of yours. Probably you aught ot edit it , although I don't know exactly how. I'm still not clear on what you had in mind while writing this.

MacFrantic's right - you're a superb poet. If only you'd give your thoughts about the rest of our poetry!

I like this alot but the last line seems like it's just a filler. Everything else is so personal and sincere that the last line with it's cliche`ness comes across like a Halmark card. Maybe something like "Is as surely as your distance grows".