Re: Products of Pacifisim by Nuit	half.italian 70.36.242.152	9-Sep-06/2:46 PM
Second lunatic here... Too in your face. A bit of mystery might help.
regarding some deleted poem...	half.italian 70.36.242.152	9-Sep-06/2:50 PM
I like the words. A bit too easy though.
Re: End of day poem by ecargo	half.italian 70.36.242.152	9-Sep-06/2:59 PM
The stanzas confused me a bit, but the words are beautiful. Wow.
regarding some deleted poem...	half.italian 70.36.242.152	9-Sep-06/3:27 PM
You're missing the point. Don't talk about the drugs. Let them inspire you.
Re: Toe Jam Poem by EDNA by Edna Sweetlove	Edna Sweetlove 85.210.213.149	9-Sep-06/4:30 PM
This is total crap. I must be out of it. 0/10. Come on folks, help make it the worst poem here - I know there's a lot of competition but try and help me!
Re: Once they were gliders. by half.italian	Dovina 12.72.43.135	9-Sep-06/4:41 PM
On first read I knew what this meant. Now after three reads I have no idea.
Re: Once they were gliders. by half.italian	Ranger 86.140.66.234	9-Sep-06/10:05 PM
Pretty cool, I'll have to come back to this later for a proper read of it :-)
Re: Visiting My Heart by drnick	Wakeboarder20 71.227.248.140	9-Sep-06/10:20 PM
Amazing imagery. Some of the best I've read in a poem. Very well written.
Re: With Old Light by Ranger	Wakeboarder20 71.227.248.140	9-Sep-06/10:27 PM
I think I'm a sucker for good imagery. Very well done.
Re: Toe Jam Poem by EDNA by Edna Sweetlove	Ulterius 82.46.97.41	10-Sep-06/6:37 AM
In order to fulfil your wish, Edna, I am happy to oblige. What a piece of trash. :)
Re: Once they were gliders. by half.italian	amanda_dcosta 202.164.139.228	10-Sep-06/8:51 AM
What is this about? Maybe I am too tired... or this has no meaning. If the latter, kindly excuse me.
regarding some deleted poem...	Ranger 86.142.242.182	10-Sep-06/12:57 PM
What an opening line - and the first stanza is utterly soul-crushing. I love it. Not too sure about the second though, the departure from a mystical sense is a bit abrupt. Somehow stanza three works really well although I'll be damned if I know why (maybe it's the simplicity of it, not giving too much weight to 'emotion'), and the last one is nice. It might work better without the final line, which seems very much designed solely as a concluder (pretty important for an endline I guess, but I'd worked out the implications beforehand, so it appeared a bit redundant).
Re: The Natural Course of Fear by half.italian	Ranger 86.142.242.182	10-Sep-06/1:00 PM
Curse of the typos strikes - 'raspberry'. Love the last line, although as an Englishman I, of course, don't feel fear ;-)
regarding some deleted poem...	Ranger 86.142.242.182	10-Sep-06/1:05 PM
I read through this earlier and I'm still making my mind up about it. There's nothing wrong with it, but I feel it needs a certain punch, a killer line somewhere. Doesn't have to be at the end, just a moment of originality or imagery or something like that. I do like the semi-repetitions though, like them a lot :-)
Re: My Prayer by amanda_dcosta	Ranger 86.142.242.182	10-Sep-06/1:17 PM
Sweet, but it could do with something other than 'amazing grace'. Other than that, nice :-)
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 12.72.42.199	10-Sep-06/4:21 PM
The first verse is sadly marvelous. Then it goes into details that confuse and degrade the good beginning, in my opinion. The last verse gets back into it, but it's choppy, compared to the first verse.
Re: The Natural Course of Fear by half.italian	Dovina 12.72.42.199	10-Sep-06/4:22 PM
Skeins of yarn are not parallel. Skeins of birds do not run up and down. It must be a sequence of events which run up and down,as opposed to something. ????
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 12.72.42.199	10-Sep-06/4:24 PM
Pretty good.
Re: Flour by MacFrantic	half.italian 70.36.242.152	10-Sep-06/5:08 PM
I love it. But at the same time the punctuation pisses me off. I don't think it adds anything more than a few characters in length.
Re: Beg Me Do by D. $ Fontera	ecargo 63.22.89.248	10-Sep-06/6:14 PM
I like the image of the map of fears and jealousy, tracing emotion like some kind of city subway map, and the image of sin commemorated as if it was some kind of statue. But in something so short, the repetition of lines doesn't really work for me--it seems like it needs more flesh or filling or something to make it more real and more complete. Still, interesting image of emotion made somehow tangible.