Second lunatic here... Too in your face. A bit of mystery might help.

The stanzas confused me a bit, but the words are beautiful. Wow.

Pretty cool, I'll have to come back to this later for a proper read of it :-)

In order to fulfil your wish, Edna, I am happy to oblige. What a piece of trash. :)

You're missing the point. Don't talk about the drugs. Let them inspire you.

This is total crap. I must be out of it. 0/10. Come on folks, help make it the worst poem here - I know there's a lot of competition but try and help me!

On first read I knew what this meant. Now after three reads I have no idea.

Amazing imagery. Some of the best I've read in a poem. Very well written.

I think I'm a sucker for good imagery. Very well done.

What an opening line - and the first stanza is utterly soul-crushing. I love it. Not too sure about the second though, the departure from a mystical sense is a bit abrupt. Somehow stanza three works really well although I'll be damned if I know why (maybe it's the simplicity of it, not giving too much weight to 'emotion'), and the last one is nice. It might work better without the final line, which seems very much designed solely as a concluder (pretty important for an endline I guess, but I'd worked out the implications beforehand, so it appeared a bit redundant).

Curse of the typos strikes - 'raspberry'. Love the last line, although as an Englishman I, of course, don't feel fear ;-)

I read through this earlier and I'm still making my mind up about it. There's nothing wrong with it, but I feel it needs a certain punch, a killer line somewhere. Doesn't have to be at the end, just a moment of originality or imagery or something like that. I do like the semi-repetitions though, like them a lot :-)

Sweet, but it could do with something other than 'amazing grace'. Other than that, nice :-)

I like the words. A bit too easy though.

The first verse is sadly marvelous. Then it goes into details that confuse and degrade the good beginning, in my opinion. The last verse gets back into it, but it's choppy, compared to the first verse.

Skeins of yarn are not parallel. Skeins of birds do not run up and down. It must be a sequence of events which run up and down,as opposed to something. ????

Pretty good.

I like the image of the map of fears and jealousy, tracing emotion like some kind of city subway map, and the image of sin commemorated as if it was some kind of statue. But in something so short, the repetition of lines doesn't really work for me--it seems like it needs more flesh or filling or something to make it more real and more complete. Still, interesting image of emotion made somehow tangible.

What is this about? Maybe I am too tired... or this has no meaning. If the latter, kindly excuse me.

I love it. But at the same time the punctuation pisses me off. I don't think it adds anything more than a few characters in length.