Re: Pale Blue by MacFrantic	Ranger 81.158.153.90	19-Sep-06/7:59 AM
Oh, I must have missed this when it was posted. Nice, stanzas 2 and 3 especially. Could do with working on the stresses a bit.
Re: Constipation by colbaby	Ranger 81.158.153.90	19-Sep-06/8:01 AM
Oh, how I laughed. I thought it was only the British who were allowed this sort of humour.
Re: Fare Price (Final Version) by Wakeboarder20	Ranger 81.158.153.90	19-Sep-06/8:05 AM
If I remember rightly, I quite liked the original. Decent enough edit, although I can never quite be sure whether you're religious or not.
Re: Head Exploding Mark 2 by pink_escape	Ranger 81.158.153.90	19-Sep-06/8:06 AM
Genius title.
regarding some deleted poem...	Ranger 81.158.153.90	19-Sep-06/8:14 AM
Greek philosopher?
Re: Constipation by colbaby	ecargo 167.219.88.140	19-Sep-06/9:22 AM
Not bad, as shit poems go. ;-) And we are, after all, the Shittiest Poetry Site on the Web (more float per inch!) (TM). Of course, nothing can match the vigor and explosive power of the -=DA-=PI classic, _Child of My Buttocks_: http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp?id=20331.
Re: Jose Streets by SupremeDreamer	Ranger 86.131.44.143	19-Sep-06/12:29 PM
Argh! The curse of the "'n" strikes again! I know, I know, I'm a Queen's English snob, I'll get over it one day... Anyway, I quite liked the story but struggled to get the beat to it. ecargo's better at this than me, but I do think it wants reworking, or maybe just reclassifying. Done as prose it would seem very akin to the monologue introduction to a character story (does need to be spoken though). Decent enough, let me know if you do any edits of this; I'd be interested to read :-)
Re: Last flight of a goose by Bobjim	Ranger 86.131.44.143	19-Sep-06/12:49 PM
Agreed with richa, order it 3,4,1,2. This is legendary :-)
regarding some deleted poem...	celticskatermatt1 72.197.175.2	19-Sep-06/6:11 PM
this was crazy jon
Re: Musical Buttocks - Cha cha cha by Edna Sweetlove	nypoet22 65.10.92.48	19-Sep-06/6:21 PM
first stanza is super. second is pointlessly gratuitous, especially the self-mention.
regarding some deleted poem...	half.italian 70.36.242.152	19-Sep-06/9:32 PM
Holy shit!
Re: Fare Price (Final Version) by Wakeboarder20	colbaby 220.233.180.7	20-Sep-06/5:09 AM
Too true. Our actions speak louder than words, or poems. Of course, we're right and they're wrong. That will be $100 for the consultation, thank you very much. Fare Price (Revised) reminds me of the folly of serving two masters. I like it.
Re: Head Exploding Mark 2 by pink_escape	colbaby 220.233.180.7	20-Sep-06/5:13 AM
Except for the spliff reference my mum would so identify with this one. But like you I don't like the barley and runny rhyme. And is evented supposed to be invented? Where is the spell checker? Or am I being a... git?
Re: Sublime by nightowl	colbaby 220.233.180.7	20-Sep-06/5:20 AM
All very herbal, I must say. Everything can be charachterised by dichotomy. Though I don't yet understand the last line. I have guides, none of them time. Perhaps concieved by the greatest champion, yet it's left to us mere mortals to merely percieve the conceived. Therein lies our biggest mistake. But isn't this sandpit fantastic?
regarding some deleted poem...	colbaby 220.233.180.7	20-Sep-06/5:29 AM
Another poem about fucking or breastfeeding. The line "Your scales are brittle warm with light" does my head in. Hence my chosen incomprehension. Was this the result sought after? I'm not complaining, just interested. Goal achieved, no doubt. The verse numbering is helpfull.
Re: Its Hard to Say by celticskatermatt1	colbaby 220.233.180.7	20-Sep-06/5:33 AM
It sounds like you have a crush on someone then you say "after this poem, hopefully everything will fall through" which to me means you're not into this burgoning relationship afterall. Is my head destined to be done in daily?
regarding some deleted poem...	colbaby 220.233.180.7	20-Sep-06/5:39 AM
Spot on. Sounds like a classic case of teen angst to me. Or even 40's angst if I'm with you. She want's to but she won't let herself because of hindering beliefs she doesnt yet understand or is too stubborn to accept. The ground is fertile for growth. The time is nigh for revelation. Your poem shows a definite direction for action, if she only accepted it. Sensational.
regarding some deleted poem...	colbaby 220.233.180.7	20-Sep-06/5:43 AM
I think I've figured this one out, dvincent. Correct me if I'm wrong, but you're taking the piss big time, aren't you?
Re: Last flight of a goose by Bobjim	colbaby 220.233.180.7	20-Sep-06/5:47 AM
I'm a freak too! Here's cheers!
Re: Prayer by amanda_dcosta	colbaby 220.233.180.7	20-Sep-06/7:29 AM
Dear Sweet Edna, "Hilarious. I laughed till I urinated." Does that mean you pissed yourself laughing at the poem or you laughed at the poem till you had to go take a piss? Big difference. Not entirely sure what you mean. Bullshit. I know exactly what you mean. You're being a funny bastard. Aren't you?