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Pale Blue (Free verse) by MacFrantic What is it like to be
Immersed in simplicity,
The sky above
And the ground, well,
Quite unfound?
Is it cherry,
Or is it lonesome,
If not very, very
Unlike bathing
In pale, blue,
Scathing waters?
Well I hope
To be an ordinary
Sort of ship
And to be equipped
With sails to sail into
A pale blue
Nothingness like you
Up the ladder:
hopscotch rocks
Down the ladder:
Fury
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Posted: August 14, 2006 12:59 AM PDT; Last modified: August 14, 2006 12:59 AM PDTWeighted score: 5.0397344 Overall Rank: 7131 The following users have marked this poem on their favorites list:
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creepshow @ 71.34.14.103
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14-Aug-06/8:14 AM
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I like the last few lines, "...sail into a pale blue Nothingness like you." Very piercing.
Oh, I must have missed this when it was posted. Nice, stanzas 2 and 3 especially. Could do with working on the stresses a bit.
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