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Pale Blue (Free verse) by MacFrantic

What is it like to be Immersed in simplicity, The sky above And the ground, well, Quite unfound? Is it cherry, Or is it lonesome, If not very, very Unlike bathing In pale, blue, Scathing waters? Well I hope To be an ordinary Sort of ship And to be equipped With sails to sail into A pale blue Nothingness like you

Ranger 19-Sep-06/7:59 AM
Oh, I must have missed this when it was posted. Nice, stanzas 2 and 3 especially. Could do with working on the stresses a bit.




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