drnick
on Remembering Nick by jessicazee
21 Feb 2007, 10:26 PM
nobody named nick is worth remembering
Ah, the insensitivity of lovers to the intricacy of words, to the seemingly unwitting lush outsiders feel, to the goddess whims of the neglected, or angelic twitters of the left. To be in love is a splendid thing, far better than poetry or idle chat. Best wishes.
hmm.
Maybe a nice quick lyric.
My suit is fitted with a drawstring so I can hoist the vent canopy any time I please; as a single venter you have merely to park your hands in your pockets and watch in horror as the tails part like soiled drapes.
What image are you going for? Where is the image? That's all.
Yes rockmage, embrace the darkside, enjoy it's cold return. ARHARHAR, me cullies.
wtf?
Topnotch sir.
The lines:
Loving the grass delighting my bare soles,
&
In the grey on grey of false dawns.
desperately needs reconsideration.
You need to redo the beginning really. Six.
I'm going to print this out and burn it outside the steps of the college I end up attending after my pilgrimage through the wastelands of american existence.
That aside, have a ten, you cad.
Yes, Mexican Monday will bring you your girl. Love this piece.
Perhaps you could explain to the collective of poemrankers how your legs have expanded over the course of the last few years. Is it not true that the bulging repletion of your thighs has caused you to wear clowns trousers? Has this not led you being addressed in the Royal Courts of Scunthorpe as Fraser Allonby Queen's Clown? Further, is not also true that the self same expansion of your legs has made it quite impossible for you to locate your penis leading to you being known on the circuit as Fraser Allonby Quo Gallo?
based on the bonus march during the depression. i've been fighting with it but it's a work in progress, it just feels generally weak to me. so i guess i'm mainly looking for some help.
Welcome back. :)
Terrible. 10.
Down on Pennsylvania
Theyâre all very gay
But Iâm here in Anacostia
Cause my cock has gone astray.
Piss poor. Give up.
Excellent work. Best poem ever written. Well done!