Is there a reason that you feel the need to torment other members? I do not even know you. I can see why she is an ex! Oh I know...you must have a worm.( Did someone upstairs sell you SHORT? I must be the early bird now! "Lucky me..." :Yawns:

Maybe if you had the right tools you'd be awake right now with a REAL woman and not just reading my poetry with your blow up doll eh?

Feeling aggressive are we?

Hmmmm...you write about poo often?

Nice rhyme.

You should use "and" instead of &...it works better.

Maybe some structure? Standing on my bed staring at the coffee can Pondering when all of this bed wetting began People at my church may say that I’m getting lazy They still haven’t seen the other side of my mattress "I’ve never been able to let myself get better" Cause I always seem to be under a better bed wetter And it’s j ust gonna stay that way forever because he purchased the top bunk

???? Er..ok.

"I will steadily hide the smell That my bacteria excretes to tell. the world I am a sick can Better opened under a ceiling fan." Interesting.

Nice rhyme. It's so er....?

Fantastic! Bravo to you. :)

This is well penned.

No not ice cream and cookies...more like prune juice and pretzels! this was witty, very nice ;)

The imagery is well done. The closure tied it up perfectly.

One of the best I've seen today....great structure!

Well worded. I like the imagery.

I like this! Oakland eh? I was born in Sonoma and lived in Bodega Bay. :)

Now that's poetry. Very nice indeed! ;)"bowl faced to the sun like a beggar, so succinctly put was its life and mine" Well put!

A fine read. This piece is very descriptive and almost like a poem I had read by Sylvia Plath. :)

"I have studied the effects of thirst firsthand and dug up pipebombs from the playground" Nice word play, it's really a stunning piece.