kingit
on Right side by <~>
23 Oct 2003, 9:57 PM
Great!- must go lie down now.
I think god'swife is a sour bitch most of the time and I also think the 2 is underserved (but so are many anonymous blues).
The title seemed a touch inorganic to the piece, but nothing too critical.
those grumpy god lovers need to lighten up
You and "senescence"- that word always makes me think of a brand name for some facial cream for the aging. Sweet of you to care, but I was just out of town and busy, on a "business trip", if you will.
Nice little moral of the story there at the end, I know what you mean.
A social worker, even off the clock.
http://mulberryfairy
on African Killer Bees, it's not the smell of smoke by <{Baba^Yaga}>
23 Oct 2003, 6:10 PM
ouch
Geschäftsreise
on African Killer Bees, it's not the smell of smoke by <{Baba^Yaga}>
23 Oct 2003, 6:33 PM
The poem was interesting, but the dialogue in the comments wins a medal
Nice images. Winter will soothe the insomnia. I love the seasons in your work.
Again, the seasons in your secret garden.
I imagine this series as an oral performance, and though I don't get it all, I appreciate it. The "recent" lineup here is full of weather poems tonight.
This is full of imagery which is great, but it could be much more potent (as poetry)if these were tightened down into short, tight jabs rather than lunging roundhouses (paragraphs). All the corporate references can probably be summed up more effectively. "Black and Latino" implies "dark-skinned". But, I like "RJ...Alma Mater."
You must write short (or long) fiction!
I guess we've lost you,Bub. I love nature. I love nature poems. But,
I almost
fell
asleep ...reading
THIS>
Why didn't you tell meeee ...
Duckstein is laced with
opium.
Cannot bare to vote..
Cogent, with a knockout ending.
captivating, eloquent, but I too, qualm with the title--neuf.
I like the title very much. But the ellipses must go, imho.
Secrets
and puzzles, and
games.