little_big_nose
on The Service by forestchild7
4 Jan 2004, 6:09 PM
it's dark and almost morbid. Pretty good
This could have only been written by someone in love
some optimism for a change (even if we are all screwed).
cool.
I wonder if it would be better for the omission of "ranch".
a ten nonetheless.
best part about this is envisioning the graphic details of you hovering over your keyboard elaborating the little crosses... you cute lil devil you.
My sentiments exactly...and I do mean exactly. Witness, and live to love again!
ha!
95% of amercians live in the false 'ego' state... culture/society conditioning of the brain, only removed uncovering all the negative layer by layer via true understanding of it.. took about 18 months of self-dialog/work/poetry 500+ pages for my ego witch was the size of texas.. haha
I m so sorry i read this and didnt tell you how much I liked so I ll tell you now I like it this much ________________________________________
10. can(s) for perfection. It's good to have more than one tool in the box.
I'm kinda the opposite of that one person, i love the begining but not the end
nice, i know how you feel and you're not alone
i enjoy the second half much more than the first, save for the delicious "wild cells". "Scar shower", too, is enough to take one. For some reason it seems uncharacteristically short for you, but that is neither here nor there--just observation. Now who knows what? i need no point-fives for this.
yea, whatever floats your goat
totally right, it sux big time
pretty much yea, all women do that
I'm more of a cat guy, but this is a damn good poem
you can inturpet this poem in so amny many ways it's great
wow, i just looked at the ratings, i thought this one was good, i guesssss i was wrong. oh well, does anyone have any comments on it for me? thanks.