regarding some deleted poem...	sca 124.191.64.6	7-Jun-07/2:47 AM
Not as good as the last I read, how-ever still mind-twisting decent. Anything that provokes thought is worth a read.
Re: Bitter by Ranger	lmp 141.154.134.3	7-Jun-07/3:41 PM
heh, gratz on the number one slot....
Re: Call Someone Right Away by jessicazee	Skamper 202.6.130.223	7-Jun-07/3:44 PM
Pretty funny - darkly so, but a fair and just thankyou to your rescuer.
regarding some deleted poem...	Skamper 202.6.130.223	7-Jun-07/3:51 PM
The Bee Gee's stayin' Alive came rushing to my head when I first read this. It has a very 70's feel to it, maybe it's because all the guys' stash was so very much on show back then.
Re: No-Strings by sca	Skamper 202.6.130.223	7-Jun-07/4:02 PM
Some great lines - not sure about the third stanza, doesn't really speak of the rebel, just some things that sound kinda rebellious.
Re: Cephalonia by Caducus	Skamper 202.6.130.223	7-Jun-07/4:10 PM
For some hollywood reason I was wanting her to have been the one who killed him, for moaning about her bread. Is that what was meant or is the first stanza a little misleading? Or am I just being twisted?
Re: Stripes by JMakStak	Skamper 202.6.130.223	7-Jun-07/4:13 PM
The language is brilliant.
Re: The kissing chair incident by Stephen Robins	Skamper 202.6.130.223	7-Jun-07/4:17 PM
Blackpool? Great little tale - true story? Surely there has been a ban on those suits of shell for years! I feel this wibbles and wobbles in places, could be tighter.
regarding some deleted poem...	Skamper 202.6.130.223	7-Jun-07/4:26 PM
Not sure about the context but I feel there are too many 'i' sounds in the one area. The last line - make me fly toward you or make me fly to where you are. I'm no expert on english but the way you wrote it doesn't seem to fit right. Could just be me, wouldn't be the first time. This seems fairly dark and for that I like it.
regarding some deleted poem...	Ranger 81.103.124.179	8-Jun-07/4:07 AM
I think it would be far funnier if the last line was "bones snap on demand".
Re: Persnickety by malpaso	Ranger 81.103.124.179	8-Jun-07/4:09 AM
Catchy, perhaps a little thin on the narrative depth, but still good fun to read aloud.
Re: Melancholy Tart by Skamper	Ranger 81.103.124.179	8-Jun-07/4:14 AM
I like it, all except the exclamation mark at the very end. Turns it from being quite a maudlin piece into what seems like it's meant to be a joke. Metrically I'd change 'remain' to 'stay', and maybe tweak the third stanza. Perhaps: "I feel a little melancholy" (whispered to no-one in particular) ..." etc.
Re: The kissing chair incident by Stephen Robins	Ranger 81.103.124.179	8-Jun-07/4:20 AM
In future I advise you to be prepared for such eventualities: always carry a portable truncheon so as to beat such presumptuous yobs across the pate for troubling you. It is important to lay down the law as soon as possible, or they will start taking all sorts of liberties like walking in public places or heckling you for a chip at 3am.
regarding some deleted poem...	Stephen Robins 90.195.96.249	8-Jun-07/12:03 PM
Does it have a cunt and a beard? I would ask Brian Blessed but he doesn't post shite poemes on a website largely populated by twats.
Re: Beslan by Ranger	drnick 24.247.158.152	8-Jun-07/1:22 PM
Flawless with an outsanding closing line. If you like that sort of thing. ;)
Re: 0 by MacFrantic	lmp 141.154.134.3	8-Jun-07/3:41 PM
pi
regarding some deleted poem...	xxx 67.172.190.253	8-Jun-07/6:59 PM
One for the angst.
Re: May Monday Explanation by MacFrantic	sca 124.191.64.6	9-Jun-07/12:03 AM
I like the first four lines, but after that it's like the meter/syllables/what-ever-poetry-nuts-call-it completely changes... I mean, the meaning works, really well, but that sudden drop between moment and erode just doesn't sit right as I read it. => Jess
Re: A Flower for Monet by Shuushin	sca 124.191.64.6	9-Jun-07/12:15 AM
Very, very nice. This tipped off my tongue beautifully, and the language/wording is excellent. It's classy in the beautiful sense.
regarding some deleted poem...	sca 124.191.64.6	9-Jun-07/12:18 AM
you're quite the character, huh?