Re: Jesus by Sing4Jesus!	sca 124.191.64.6	9-Jun-07/12:19 AM
I like your poetry. Why are you listed so lowly?
regarding some deleted poem...	sca 124.191.64.6	9-Jun-07/12:34 AM
indecent descent? I quite like it for the smile I put on my face, but I'm not quite sure if it's poetry.. ;) here's a bonus 3 for that smile.
Re: Persnickety by malpaso	sca 124.191.64.6	9-Jun-07/12:42 AM
I think this could be expanded on, lines changes and lengthened, others added. Fatten up the story if you will - the story's clear but the details aren't. => Jess
Re: turd cutter by Count Flatula	sca 124.191.64.6	9-Jun-07/1:52 AM
you know, the content isn't why I'm giving this a 0, because I actually find feminism provoking bits and pieces amusing. I'm giving this a 0 because you could've done something better. the meter's out and the rhyme happens once. put some time into it.
Re: leaves of clover by lmp	Dovina 12.74.101.236	9-Jun-07/2:37 PM
"the bees drone on" is a good line because drones do no work. So I wonder at "Drones' labor" Also, the truck would have been loaded with honey, not nect'r or nectar. "we never knows"??? Otherwise pretty good.
Re: My Sinatra by sca	Dovina 12.74.101.236	9-Jun-07/2:39 PM
Sinatra serenades for the suffering secretary - on the radio driving home.
Re: Remembering Joy by ifni	malpaso 70.245.24.34	10-Jun-07/6:14 PM
great commentary on beating writers block and profoundly wistful and brief---just the way i like 'em. keep on writing!!!!!
Re: Dixon Country Store, Kentucky by Dovina	lmp 141.154.134.3	11-Jun-07/9:35 AM
my favorite one so far in the series. to me, a cycling tour is a great way to see the way of life in areas like this. the pace is slow enough to allow it to sink in, slow enough to really get "done" with something before a new thing comes along to try and understand. i imagine this is the conversation you heard around you as you ate before heading out, a "fly on the wall" perspective, on the "outside looking in", etc. etc. well done. the use of "May" only 2 lines apart (lines 4 & 6) is a little distracting. I don't know if you could use a different word choice (seasonal rather than monthly) for the first reference. or maybe these are actual quotes...
Re: Dixon Country Store, Kentucky by Dovina	lmp 141.154.134.3	11-Jun-07/9:41 AM
i looked up milo seed since i was unfamiliar with it. used a lot in birdseed mixes. is it used basically as a soil enriching crop for planting the "real" crop of wheat, etc.?
Re: rear end of the storm by malpaso	Dovina 204.8.187.74	11-Jun-07/2:39 PM
Midwest rain will soak you this time of year, but it's a happy kind of soaking when the air is warm. At the front of the cloud is where the lightning lurks and where a lone cyclist or pedestrian sticks up like a rod to catch it, either that or the funnel.
Re: The Call by Skamper	Dovina 204.8.187.74	11-Jun-07/2:42 PM
I don't get it.
regarding some deleted poem...	Skamper 202.6.128.23	11-Jun-07/3:50 PM
I always thought old peoples bones just kinda crumbled, learned something today.
Re: Dixon Country Store, Kentucky by Dovina	Skamper 202.6.128.23	11-Jun-07/3:57 PM
I like this especially the last stanza, it has quite a lazy feel to it, and I found it quite a matter-of-fact read. Like I guess they take whatever comes along as part of their life.
Re: rear end of the storm by malpaso	Skamper 202.6.128.23	11-Jun-07/4:11 PM
Love the rain.
Re: leaves of clover by lmp	Skamper 202.6.128.23	11-Jun-07/4:21 PM
I like the story, and the beginning shorter stanzas, really gets the rhythm, but the longer lines are kinda awkward. The use of simple language in a story of this kind benifits (I think) from some flowery descriptions as in - gyroscopically and Apis mellifera. I can't even begin to get nect'r and wreck to rhyme. (could just be my accent) Rhyme is so damned hard to achieve without seeming forced.
regarding some deleted poem...	lmp 141.154.134.3	12-Jun-07/9:09 AM
oh most definitely a favorite.
regarding some deleted poem...	lmp 141.154.134.3	12-Jun-07/9:10 AM
i think it would be more "humerus" if the bones turned to sponges instead.
Re: The Call by Skamper	lmp 141.154.134.3	12-Jun-07/9:25 AM
are you watching wheel of fortune of something? or maybe this is "the big wheel" on the price is right? dunno, it is a bit vague. a bit more power maybe in some of the action would help bring out the meaning or intensity of being forced into a decision you do not agree with. i think this has some potential.
Re: The Lover and The Rapist by Skamper	lmp 141.154.134.3	12-Jun-07/9:29 AM
not sure i really want to know what this is about... i kind of got use of internet for shopping, deflowering of a virgin, and those two don't seem to paint a nice picture.
Re: Take-Off by oneglove	lmp 141.154.134.3	12-Jun-07/9:32 AM
leaving Athens? :D i can answer the question: to go to Delphi, navel of the world.