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Remembering Joy (Free verse) by ifni it was darkness, and then
joy
as hope entwined my soul
it was the
dawning,
remembering
my mind, stretching
oh, yes, I have one -
a mind
and thoughts to think with it
words to spill from it
like sweet fire,
running from my fingertips
I, the creative
joy.
Up the ladder:
Death by Liquid
Down the ladder:
Fly Paper
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Posted: March 16, 2002 1:15 AM PST; Last modified: March 16, 2002 1:15 AM PSTWeighted score: 5.128089 Overall Rank: 5601 Comments:
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16-Mar-02/1:21 AM
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Do I get to cheat and put the same comment? ;)
Isn't it a little eyes to just throw together random words? There were a couple things that matched up however; "sweet fire" wouldn't have thought about its taste before. good one.
"oh, yes, I have one-/ a mind" just destroys this piece.
I really love this: especially "oh, yea, I have one - a mind and thoughts to think with it"
great commentary on beating writers block and profoundly wistful and brief---just the way i like 'em. keep on writing!!!!!
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