i like how the lines got shorter and shorter, but if you were going to lengthen the end lines it may carry more impact if only the last line is affected. other than that it was enjoyable, though not stellar.

We know how: Professor Plum with the candlestick.

I would beware that 1) your first line [perhaps unconsciously] sounds like Carl Sandburg's superfamoso "Fog", and 2) it doesn't make any sense to crawl on one's feet.

"stimulating his feet" - evocative.

unbelievable. It reads like a page of my diary. I can SOOOO relate to this. Kewl. my parents really never understood me neither. I hav not cut mysefl in 2 weeks, but its so hard.

not learned, earned.

is "How was it done?"

Did the search, but being at work was afraid to click some links - is it gross? Will it be more gross than a pineal cyst? Cuz, so far that tips my scales at horrific.

the, with, by, the, on. Five syllables gone saying nothing, that is a whole line.

berkley => berkeley.

Actually, I ask how things were done quite often.

I declare this the pimpliest sonnet ever. Thank you.

this is not iambic pentameter. sonnets never have the word "soft" okay, had to do that /joke mode off It's unusual for a sonnet to have a refrain line - and I like that. None of the rhymes feel forced, which is cool. Downside: the last line doesn't make sense to me. Its a strong line and alone it makes a nice finish - but how it fits in the context is lost on my small human brain. Still - a nine in my book.

the answer, btw, is always "with mirrors"

haiku shouldn't ryme, roundeye (nor should they really sound "poetic"). I'm serious, I didn't make this crap up. Change "feet" to "knees", and it will make more sense with "creeps" - unfortunately you are still stuck with the rhyme. dunno. have a 7

nice complex internal and end-rhymes. ballys - s/b "ballets"

this is one of the more confusing dialogues i've read lately...

good job ripping off the title from a john mayer lryic.. "this might be a quarter life crisis" (why georgia)

Some good sentiments here. You might want to fix this though..."like I’ll will never die."

kind of lame that someone (?) had to go to a bunch of computers at a computer station and "anonymously" vote 10 (check the IP addresses, they're all sharing a port). i feel obligated to give a zero as a balancing force.