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on Lover by daveslady
10 May 2004, 11:26 PM
Here's an interesting question: Who in the fuck is dave? #1 For fuck's sake why should the layman care? # the 2...
Call me, I'm naked.
i am taken in by your imagery and your self-assured-ness. (real word? don't know)
i don't know, what kind of virgin runs with a point?
this tasted like the desert/dessert. yum.
Quite like it, although it does seem to hanker after a garden that is in a pond!
I have no clue what this means other than the closing line. Still, I like it's originality. Particularly the beat.
The folks cursing are doing the stumbling, I assume.
Sidenote: Thank you for all of your comments and help
on my poems. I'm not sure I'd thanked you in a while.
Sex is a butterfly but a butterfly does not buzz
and a buzz does not flow
nor does it flood.
hmm. first things first---dare i say it? i demand the you!
It was all going swimmingly until the end of the first verse, then it became a bit incoherent.
N.B. 'The pool has' not the pool's possessive.
Okay....so the first part is taken from 'Unloveable', by The Smiths....and the second part? Either racist crap or self-loathing black man...either way...crap.
Hmmmm, I don't much care for spiders....kind of freaks me out...
clarified.
Excellent.
The title has to change.
The first paragraph is hilarious,
and the second tries to hard to pull
something off that's unnecesary. so here is what I would save out of the utter tripe in your last paragraph.
"Here's my newest theory: The planes were already airborne
when a passenger asked if he could meet the pilots. The
stewardess graciously took him to the front, barged into
the "cockpit", the passenger, who just happened to be of middle eastern
descent, screamed "Jihaad!" which of course is arabic for "cocksuckers!"
and began to wrestle for
control of the aircraft sending it careeneing into
one of the two largest phallic symbols there were. Now,
if it had only been one, everything would have been fine.
No. The freakshow must go on. The process repeats itself
all to soon, and now there are two holes side by side
instead. No wonder the arabs are pissed. Even they can't stop America's
openly gay attitude.
["Here's my newest theory: The planes were already airborne
when a passenger asked if he could meet the pilots. The
stewardess graciously took him to the front, barged into
the "cockpit", the passenger, who just happened to be of middle eastern
descent, screamed "Jihaad!] this is good and [began to wrestle for
control of the aircraft sending it careeneing into
one of the two largest phallic symbols there were. ] write those statements back in with some good bridging, keep your opinion neutral, the more neutral and factual the beeter, but lose all the other crap in the second paragraph besides what's bracketed imediately.
hey guys stop being HATERS this is a great poeme because it comes from the heart and that's what really matters isn't it?/?? Sasha who are you to tell someone what to write about poetry is all about emotions and it doesn't matter what words you use if you're poeme hasn't got emotions then it isn't a poeme -10-
good ? from poetandknowit. I'm often called dave's woman by him and his friends when I call or go to his house. So, when i signed up to this website it was an easy title for me to use. The simplest one that came to mind first. I, however, know that I am not property and refuse to be treated as such. This tile is more of a joke among friends rather than a tile. But thank you for your concern and if i knew of a way to change my name without loosing the scores and comments I may have very well thought about doing so.
wonderful ? B. Dave is my Fiance of 4 1/2 years. It has peeked my interest as to why my user name has sparked such an interest but nonetheless its my name among friends as well. well, its really daves woman but i dont particularly care for that one. this name was just the first thing i thought of when choosing a user anme for the website.
love that last line. many women try to embark on that adventure and often fail, as they very well should.