Re: Puke by Dr Fartspittle	some deleted user 80.225.105.228	31-Jul-07/1:47 PM
Oh no fuck head colin has not gone shit face, he has been away you cunt fuckhead wanker of a fuckhead bastard wanker.So bad mouth me you fucking shitface wanking fuckhead, with drivel such as this crap filled fuckfaced excuse for apoem? You have some fucking nerve you fucking wanker.
Re: Two More Cunts Who Are One Cunt by mr cunt	some deleted user 80.225.105.228	31-Jul-07/1:50 PM
Oh dear oh dear fuck face no balls eh? well well well, you crap filled fucking excuse for a shit filled fuckhead. Colin has been away, but now hes back. want to insult me more you moronic little fuck face? well? you turd filled scumbag wanking shit face arsehole, with balls to say anything when you think one of the people you have named has left? you fucking wanker, you are an over bred fucking shit with a braun fit for pissing in. Got the message?
Re: intricate babbling by eunique	richa 85.210.158.56	31-Jul-07/1:54 PM
Haiku don't tend to have many syllables to play with so I would lose 'you'. As haiku are supposed to have two intersecting images I would say third line should read 'a stone thrown' to seperate it from the turbulent heart fragile body image.
regarding some deleted poem...	richa 85.210.158.56	31-Jul-07/1:55 PM
They are pretty godawful these towelheads. -10-
Re: Puke by Dr Fartspittle	some deleted user 80.225.105.228	31-Jul-07/1:56 PM
and another thing fuckface, my second name is douglas and so i use the name colin douglas as my name here and everywhere else, got it shit fopr brains, well? fuck head? if you had the bollocks to look up Dr Peter Douglas on the internet, you will find 3 of them. I have no idea which one is the person who came here but hetwo of them have photos. If you are allowed on one of the other sites i belong to you will se my photo wart and fucking all. then look up the othet two. You will see fuckface that they are totally different. Got it? so you don't you or any opf the other fuck heads on this ever call me by another name, got it fuck faced ci=unt of a shitbag excuse for a human being?
Re: Proctor, the patient must be beaten. by Y2kSlamPoet	richa 85.210.158.56	31-Jul-07/1:58 PM
Probably. 'who had turned silent in order to achieve the illusion of Zen' amused me though.
Re: Two More Cunts Who Are One Cunt by mr cunt	some deleted user 80.225.105.228	31-Jul-07/2:01 PM
and asnother thing you miserable excuse for a wanking sin of a bitch. My second name is douglas, that means i am colin douglas skilton, got it? If you look up as i did on the internet, Dr Peter Douglas, there are three people with the same name. Two of them have photos as i have on poetryshared, look at all three photos and cunt for brains you will see that we are all different so fuckhead where do you get off saying i am two p[oeple? well i'm waiting you fucking wanker. Don't you or any other of the miserable bastards that use this excuse for a poetry site ever bad mouth me again.
Re: We're Off by Skamper	richa 85.210.158.56	31-Jul-07/2:02 PM
The brooding skies/ frowned/ omen. No no no. Overwrought and not in keeping with the tone of the rest of the poem.
Re: iPod by Christof	richa 85.210.158.56	31-Jul-07/2:10 PM
They don't really get between your brain and cranium do they. 'Filling my vessels with silvery xylem' and 'My thoughts are wooded, my breath has leaves.' aren't particularly strong metaphors imo.
Re: California Bound by Dovina	richa 85.210.158.56	31-Jul-07/2:17 PM
Not a limerick. A limerick would read more like: In Utah I was checked up and down by a sun bleached old mormon clown he wanted a wife riding a bike complete with a republican gown.
Re: Dying Candle by cheese.doodles	richa 85.210.158.56	31-Jul-07/2:18 PM
Wax isn't stolen by the air it is fed upon by the flame.
Re: Lullaby by lexxie100	dclark 71.29.8.221	1-Aug-07/4:11 AM
I honestly love it, very catchy. here's an 8, and a myspace add.
regarding some deleted poem...	dclark 71.29.8.221	1-Aug-07/8:42 AM
why do you only rank me zero, and give me no criticism?
Re: Amber's Witness by cyan9	dclark 71.29.8.221	1-Aug-07/9:07 AM
This makes my moods change, I go from a worried, to a happier more secure feeling. I like this. Its a very good piece. My Favorite out of all of your work.
regarding some deleted poem...	PoetryIsDead 76.97.67.182	1-Aug-07/8:48 PM
I think you were trying for 7 syllables on the second line... I think...
Re: All tonight wandering along in the broken dreams by Prince of Void	Christof 62.121.23.56	3-Aug-07/1:29 AM
Believe me, it's over. Get over it, 'Meadows of owes?'
Re: Caprice by PoetryIsDead	SupremeDreamer 192.220.136.191	3-Aug-07/12:13 PM
The last line is a little confusing to me. Blessed with seven.
regarding some deleted poem...	SupremeDreamer 192.220.136.191	3-Aug-07/12:20 PM
Marching towards my death. I'd much prefer this ending, simply because you, sir, are already Old with extreme Age. :)
Re: All tonight wandering along in the broken dreams by Prince of Void	SupremeDreamer 192.220.136.191	3-Aug-07/12:22 PM
If your going to do this sort of shit, why not do it better than the classic pimple cliche piece? Blessed with one.
regarding some deleted poem...	SupremeDreamer 192.220.136.191	3-Aug-07/12:29 PM
The second line has 8 syllables. Cut out the 'I' and you will have seven as required (alone = 2 syllables). Capitalize 'I' in the third line. Also, this isn't really a Haiku in the traditional imagery sense. blessed with four.