on Dreaming by TripleHGurl
18 Nov 2002, 10:37 AM
that's swell, but i fucking hate wrestling, t.v dinners...and dreamers.6
on some deleted poem
21 Nov 2002, 1:52 PM
until tomorrow, or nothing...so it should either be oh my love. or change last line to until tomorrow...maybe? who knows? there are about four or five brilliant sentences in this poem, like the hair thing and umm the hell yesterday part and Zephyrs and moors are loads of fun...there's alot of shit here too, not saying i don't suffer from the same hangups occasionally in my work, just be aware is all. ,here 8.
on Wheelin' N Rockin' by INTRANSIT
20 Nov 2002, 9:59 PM
you are an odd fish for sure. cheers! i was kinda inclined perceptively to the image of the bear in the weeds.
on some deleted poem
20 Nov 2002, 10:03 PM
did you say pedant?
how about dark instead of dark's.
if the stanza's were somehow reversed second first and so it would be better as far as the arc goes, because the first stanza is super powerfull the second can barely compliment it.
how about dark instead of dark's.
if the stanza's were somehow reversed second first and so it would be better as far as the arc goes, because the first stanza is super powerfull the second can barely compliment it.
on A lighthouse by emilyowey
18 Nov 2002, 10:12 AM
i just queefed, while cleaning out my cat's ear with my four inch pinky nail.5.
on some deleted poem
18 Nov 2002, 10:18 AM
two steps forward..three steps back..listen to more of the who and get some lithium..oh, and open up your god damn curtains for christ sake.
on The Breathing Dead by Caducus
18 Nov 2002, 10:22 AM
stanzas three and four should have there last coma'd statements underneath...it looks lame extending out to the side that way..still a powerful sentiment. take this rabbit and find it a hat. 6.
on untitled#3 by darby pyn
18 Nov 2002, 10:22 AM
superb. 8.
on Bloody Sonner by The Eskimo King
18 Nov 2002, 10:25 AM
call this hemoglobin blues, but replace every word blood with smegma...that is all. flush!
on It started with a kiss by little_angel_maria
18 Nov 2002, 10:28 AM
the aroma of your lynx? (possibly brilliant) and just when i needed you mouth..is pretty extravagent also...slut. 6.
on some deleted poem
18 Nov 2002, 10:30 AM
lies and abortion are bad...but dreams are a phoenix..immortal. 8.
on some deleted poem
18 Nov 2002, 10:31 AM
Still the best. 9. see children if he can do it, so can you. not.
on Bowstones, 21st June 200 by Nicholas Jones
18 Nov 2002, 10:36 AM
you sure light (i mean like) street lights i was hooked from the first parenthesied part..than it got a bit mono for med...not that monos bad, but don't you ever get out of the dark of winter FUCK! you're breaking my guitar strings over here for christ sake what? do you need a post card or something? here borrow my pea coat. 7.
on I'm a homicidal kind of guy (spoof of every 'down-home' song you've ever heard) by Yardbird
18 Nov 2002, 10:42 AM
throttling is fun and good for hangovers...and spain..well. a pleasent enough place for cranium lobs...nice song. 8.
on some deleted poem
17 Nov 2002, 10:37 PM
now i'm thoroughly confused. WHO IN THE FUCK ARE YOU!? 7.
on e-mail from a friend by josh_5o
15 Nov 2002, 12:19 AM
right!?try....laying on the freeway and counting differential gears...works every time.7.
on Sisters of mercy by strider1
15 Nov 2002, 12:17 AM
next.
on Sisters of mercy by strider1
15 Nov 2002, 12:17 AM
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on Everyone loves me- not. by UAFANTHORPEY
21 Nov 2002, 1:57 PM
what's the wwe?