| Re: Sisters of mercy by strider1 |
15-Nov-02/12:17 AM |
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| Re: Sisters of mercy by strider1 |
15-Nov-02/12:17 AM |
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| Re: e-mail from a friend by josh_5o |
15-Nov-02/12:19 AM |
right!?try....laying on the freeway and counting differential gears...works every time.7.
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| Re: I Cry by casey |
17-Nov-02/9:42 PM |
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i enjoy the verb and noun tweaks, but that's about it. 6...and also. i don't believe you.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
17-Nov-02/10:37 PM |
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now i'm thoroughly confused. WHO IN THE FUCK ARE YOU!? 7.
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| Re: A lighthouse by emilyowey |
18-Nov-02/10:12 AM |
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i just queefed, while cleaning out my cat's ear with my four inch pinky nail.5.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
18-Nov-02/10:18 AM |
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two steps forward..three steps back..listen to more of the who and get some lithium..oh, and open up your god damn curtains for christ sake.
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| Re: The Breathing Dead by Caducus |
18-Nov-02/10:22 AM |
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stanzas three and four should have there last coma'd statements underneath...it looks lame extending out to the side that way..still a powerful sentiment. take this rabbit and find it a hat. 6.
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| Re: untitled#3 by darby pyn |
18-Nov-02/10:22 AM |
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| Re: Bloody Sonner by The Eskimo King |
18-Nov-02/10:25 AM |
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call this hemoglobin blues, but replace every word blood with smegma...that is all. flush!
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| Re: It started with a kiss by little_angel_maria |
18-Nov-02/10:28 AM |
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the aroma of your lynx? (possibly brilliant) and just when i needed you mouth..is pretty extravagent also...slut. 6.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
18-Nov-02/10:30 AM |
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lies and abortion are bad...but dreams are a phoenix..immortal. 8.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
18-Nov-02/10:31 AM |
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Still the best. 9. see children if he can do it, so can you. not.
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| Re: Bowstones, 21st June 200 by Nicholas Jones |
18-Nov-02/10:36 AM |
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you sure light (i mean like) street lights i was hooked from the first parenthesied part..than it got a bit mono for med...not that monos bad, but don't you ever get out of the dark of winter FUCK! you're breaking my guitar strings over here for christ sake what? do you need a post card or something? here borrow my pea coat. 7.
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| Re: Dreaming by TripleHGurl |
18-Nov-02/10:37 AM |
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that's swell, but i fucking hate wrestling, t.v dinners...and dreamers.6
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| Re: I'm a homicidal kind of guy (spoof of every 'down-home' song you've ever heard) by Yardbird |
18-Nov-02/10:42 AM |
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throttling is fun and good for hangovers...and spain..well. a pleasent enough place for cranium lobs...nice song. 8.
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| Re: Wheelin' N Rockin' by INTRANSIT |
20-Nov-02/9:59 PM |
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you are an odd fish for sure. cheers! i was kinda inclined perceptively to the image of the bear in the weeds.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
20-Nov-02/10:03 PM |
did you say pedant?
how about dark instead of dark's.
if the stanza's were somehow reversed second first and so it would be better as far as the arc goes, because the first stanza is super powerfull the second can barely compliment it.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
21-Nov-02/1:52 PM |
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until tomorrow, or nothing...so it should either be oh my love. or change last line to until tomorrow...maybe? who knows? there are about four or five brilliant sentences in this poem, like the hair thing and umm the hell yesterday part and Zephyrs and moors are loads of fun...there's alot of shit here too, not saying i don't suffer from the same hangups occasionally in my work, just be aware is all. ,here 8.
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| Re: Everyone loves me- not. by UAFANTHORPEY |
21-Nov-02/1:57 PM |
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