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11-May-04/1:05 PM |
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Okay....so the first part is taken from 'Unloveable', by The Smiths....and the second part? Either racist crap or self-loathing black man...either way...crap.
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| Re: ...So We Stayed In The Water by Fear of Garbage |
11-May-04/1:09 PM |
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Hmmmm, I don't much care for spiders....kind of freaks me out...
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12-May-04/11:37 AM |
The fact that Hypatia is gone is definitely a shame. Someone should start a petition to get nentwined to e-mail her to come back. She was a good contributer.
On the subject of the poem: I thought is was quite good and actually made me think of nuclear winter in a literal sense, as I'm too dense to read into underlying meanings. Have you ever read a dexcription of what a nuclear winter would be like? Scary stuff...good thing we found all those WMDs.....
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12-May-04/11:55 AM |
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I've become quite fond of the 'Bleach' series and this is the best so far.
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| Re: Dial Tone by cuddlytiger17 |
12-May-04/3:34 PM |
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This is better than the last one of yours that I read. I think you just need to expand your vocabulary a little bit and you'll be okay.
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| Re: Dear Willy, from Romeo (Edit) by Sasha |
12-May-04/3:39 PM |
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Not bad, but I don't know if you should call this a lyric.
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| Re: an ode to hypatia by francis nor capule |
13-May-04/2:02 PM |
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| Re: She Dreams of Yesterday by Phalkon |
13-May-04/2:07 PM |
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Not too bad, but you may want to consider changing this to a lyric and adding a chorus or something. Just a thought...
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| Re: Prophets by unknown^user |
13-May-04/2:11 PM |
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What's the world coming to when even God can't look at internet porn?
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| Re: FINGER PIE by titan69 |
13-May-04/2:13 PM |
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14-May-04/3:04 PM |
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Ahhh, tequila...that which makes me feel like hell. Very nice.
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14-May-04/3:10 PM |
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You need to write something really crappy so I can stop giving you nines and tens (it's getting rather old).
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15-May-04/10:01 AM |
Hmm, thats two in a row talking about cutting. Actually, regarding the line "Proves that I am still alive, But provides absolutely no comfort.":
People who self-mutilate often do it because it is a comfort to them. It makes them feel in control and takes their mind off of depression (or whatever other minor thing going wrong in their life that they percieve to be of major significance). So, in all actuality, they do recieve comfort from this act and will oftentimes tell you that it feels good.
Of course, I may be misinterpreting this entire thing. In which case please just consider this an uninteresting tidbit of information.
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| Re: Gravity Rides by Jealousy |
15-May-04/10:12 AM |
Here's the man with teeth
like God's shoeshine,
He sparkles, shimmers, shines.
This needs to have quotes around it.
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16-May-04/12:45 PM |
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16-May-04/12:50 PM |
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| Re: Slayer Sucks by peaceseeker |
17-May-04/1:24 PM |
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A 10 simply for the title (and the poem's not bad either. Slayer does suck.
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| Re: and the world evolves by peaceseeker |
17-May-04/1:26 PM |
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I'd give the poem an 8, but since I just read that you're a social worker I'm going to give you a 10. This is because, as a social worker, I know how bad it is.
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| Re: 'Till Then by sliver |
17-May-04/1:32 PM |
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That's quite a sad little song...played mostly in minor chords I'd bet..
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| Re: Sunrise by Katrina |
17-May-04/1:37 PM |
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Well, for starters, I would work on your spelling (although I think many of the ones here are simply typos).
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