Re: a comment on Oxywarmonger by poetandknowit	24-Mar-03/10:28 AM
My name is settle. I am an art student from Rhode Island. I paint pretty pictures. I am so cool! yea!
Re: a comment on Oxywarmonger by poetandknowit	24-Mar-03/10:05 AM
Hmmm. I need to get out more. How odd. I have not been around for almost two months. Have I been on your mind that long? You were not on my mind in sunny Australia. Or snowy NZ. And if it wasn't for the Kiwis screwing up the boat race, I might still be there. But, yes, I need to get out more. I agree. Good thing I have chosen not to go the route of the war correspondent. Anyway, I know you are not the pig guy because he is a better writer than you. But I know he is your buddy. It is good to have friends in these dark days. Nick Jones just informed us all that we Americans have killed more Brits then the Iraqis have. Are you keeping score at home: It is 14 to 2. War covered as a reality sporting event. Do you think Bush and Blair will go to Disneyland when it is all over? And will they talk about losing the battles but winning the war? You are excessively emotional about what is said on this site. There are many more matters that should be given your thoughts rather than how I vote, which is simply because much of the work on this site is not so hot. I try to help when I see some potential: please refer to my comments to openwound last night. Other than that, what is the point? Thanks for the kind words. I will cherish them and hold them close to my heart.
Re: a comment on One Country by poetandknowit	24-Mar-03/9:08 AM
Will you go have a cup of tea? You sound utterly foolish. This poem, even in a pure rough draft stage as it is here, is better than anything you could dare write is. In addition, just so you know my dear high school lad, I at one time voted all you poems into the top 15. You and ranger were the champs. I was sick and tired of listening to you both whine. You were giving the British a bad lot. However, I believe dear Z countered my attempts and pushed you back down. Being that I do not have a slew of multiple personas, I could not compete. So there is the voting scandal the like of Piltdown. But that was month ago when I still cared.
Re: a comment on Oxywarmonger by poetandknowit	24-Mar-03/9:00 AM
I believe you are Maffy, are you not. Hmmm. Anyway, it is sad you would delete my comments. It only goes to show you that you cannot accept criticism whether constructive or just designed to spark you ire because it is just so damn easy and fun. Why are you so obsessed with voting? The only reason I mention it is to get your goat. So childish. As far as the poems go I am just speaking to you like any reasonable literary journal would. Your poems are painfully overdramatic and adjective laden weaklings. Quite possibly the worst on the site. It is just funny that you have the young pimple poets always swooning over you. And I am not vain. I am quite happy being ugly and fat. Thank you. Now, please, act like a man and calm down. Turn off the emotional goat getter. You look foolish in these dark times.
Re: Life by Luv2write	23-Mar-03/9:26 PM
What the hell is this? Woe is I?
Re: Leave by Luv2write	23-Mar-03/9:20 PM
Wow, who turned out the punctuation?
Re: a comment on Oxywarmonger by poetandknowit	23-Mar-03/8:45 PM
If I invited you to my batbasement you would be there in a second. Pants down!
Re: a comment on Oxywarmonger by poetandknowit	23-Mar-03/7:52 PM
Considering W. Owen was a young poet who wrote of his experience in actual trenches where WMD were prevalent in the form of various gases and the like I would dare say, nope, not me. If you had any ability for skilled analysis you would realize this poem really has little to do with actual war and much less to do with actual "battlefield" combat of any sort, especially the kind described in Mr. Owens work. It is not any sort of vain attempt at what you might think is a protest poem or a "war poem" related to the current situation going on in the Middle East. You are wrong in that regard. It would not be a vain attempt at creating a protest poem because it is not one. I suppose you could say it is a vain attempt at creating satire, but hey, what the heck. And another thing: hahahahahahahaha.
Re: a comment on Shut Up by openwounds	23-Mar-03/7:25 PM
It is weak because you start with a rather decent line and create a set up for an extended metaphor that might be rather effective, but you lose it quickly with a ambiguous second line, which I would cut and make the third line the second line, which extends the metaphor in better fashion. Also the problem with the silence line is 1) a cliche and 2) confusing because in reality when the image is brought to life it makes no sense. Also, who are "they"? And what are you going for with the white carpet: innocence, purity, pre-lapsarian language. And considering the poem has to do with words and the tongue is an extended metaphor for that, the last line trips the reader. I think you have a nice idea and with some thought, you could express the concept better utilizing solid imagery within the framework of the original metaphor. Good luck.
Re: Shut Up by openwounds	23-Mar-03/7:07 PM
Can you really hear silence? I believe there is a point in complete quiet where the ears can actually feel pain because they are trying so hard to hear something. Anyway, besides that I find the poem quite bad. Sorry. Have a nice day.
Re: Easy Way Out by Blindproject217	23-Mar-03/7:01 PM
Is this about a pig?
Re: The Bloody War Of Angels by Caducus	23-Mar-03/7:00 PM
hahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahaha. no, wait. hahahahahahaaaaaahahahahahahahahahahah. This poem is beyond bad.
Re: a comment on Oxywarmonger by poetandknowit	23-Mar-03/3:02 PM
Tell me your not really that dense?
Re: Triptych: Rural by lastobelus	16-Mar-03/7:51 PM
You swear fucking more than Mamet. the last one takes the cake. Can't say I am all that fond of the others. But what the fuck, eh.
Re: The Song I Miss by Miggy	16-Mar-03/7:48 PM
the song remains the same, migster.
Re: a comment on Looks like war, but tastes like chicken by Jeremi B. Handrinos	16-Mar-03/7:46 PM
So she is staying or not. Or is it still in the thinking stage. Money is money, but the key is free food. Of course, with management comes the worry of being tied up in the back room and pounded on the head for the safe combination. Or Ornella coming in on a Friday night and ordering everything on the menu and the running out just as it is all at the register. She would do something like that, I suppose. And then say it was an acting lesson. How is GW anyway. I haven't talked to her in ages. Well, it is good to see you are finally making the rent on the pen. It is never good to be all talk.
Re: Blue Fuckin' Moon by lastobelus	16-Mar-03/7:33 PM
Some pretty good writing in here surrounded by obvious influences that take the voice from your own. Find out who you are in this piece and make it work. A thoughtful rewrite would clean things up.
Re: Looks like war, but tastes like chicken by Jeremi B. Handrinos	16-Mar-03/7:22 PM
Pretty funny stuff. Inspired by the girlfriend's job no doubt.
Re: a comment on Crucifixion by Mr Pig	16-Mar-03/7:20 PM
The piece of writing is by no mean deep nor requires much in the way of thought. It says nothing profound and is merely for a good laugh.
Re: Karma by blankel	11-Mar-03/8:40 AM
Interesting spin on the pimple poem.