Re: a comment on One Country by poetandknowit	15-Oct-02/9:01 AM
Yo no entiendo completamente la pregunta.
Re: Two Towers by Tascobar	14-Oct-02/1:28 PM
But are you really waiting for a plane if you are at work in WTF? I would have liked this more if they had crashed into an airport.
Re: Child of my Buttocks by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	14-Oct-02/1:23 PM
How is it I am continually suckered into reading poems about what comes out of your pestilent ass? Tell me! I see you have a fan club. And I am not a tart. you are.
Re: a comment on One Country by poetandknowit	14-Oct-02/9:43 AM
Your over sensitive nature is amusing. Baby as in poem. It is quite a new sort of thing; as first draft as my first drafts go.
Re: a comment on One Country by poetandknowit	14-Oct-02/7:34 AM
Quite right, quite right. Still a baby And in progress. Thanks for the catch.
Re: a comment on A poets call to arms by INTRANSIT	13-Oct-02/10:27 PM
you did what? Horus8 and then...huh? Just say it is a goof poem.
Re: Angel by Mutant_X	13-Oct-02/9:48 PM
Good god this is bad, and correcting the typos will not make it better. Good try though. Keep it up!!
Re: A poets call to arms by INTRANSIT	13-Oct-02/9:46 PM
Goof poem.
Re: a comment on Wednesday's Breaking by poetandknowit	13-Oct-02/7:00 PM
Dead shape is there for a reason, and in your critique, you have pointed out exactly part of the poem's intentions. So, think on it some more. Mr. Magpie, you have valid points and I am working through them. thanks.
Re: The Washing by strider1	9-Oct-02/1:39 PM
It is the return of Newbie and bigbigdog (aka ASTRO GLIDE), Turbo Tom and the many other names you thought up in your little room.
Re: a comment on Trembling Worry by Ninoy_Instigator	9-Oct-02/1:15 PM
That is the spirit a young pugilist should have. If it is not against your religion, you should look into the like of Thom Jones and, of course, Hemingway. Both had aspirations with the fists and both spin a pretty good yarn.
Re: a comment on Sisters of mercy by strider1	9-Oct-02/1:03 PM
It is Dolyum! Are you goth, tint?
Re: a comment on Sisters of mercy by strider1	9-Oct-02/12:58 PM
Then you are a 19-year-old undergrad, like my new friend Balackball and Tint, here. Now I see. And fingering convention? You are not doing that here. You are imitating someone else who fingered convention, just like a young lad would.
Re: a comment on Ambiguous Love Poem For A Girl I Once Knew by poetandknowit	9-Oct-02/11:36 AM
Thanks. I am glad I have at least some potential. Mum and pop think so. The sun thing is a play on John Donne's "The Sun Rising". It is an allegory. Does that make sense? Poets use that sort of thing sometimes, you know, to give the poem a little something more. And I suppose I use "and" as a stylistic choice. It is definitely a comtemporary American sort of thing. I use it much the same way you use too many commas, except for different reasons. I want to keep things moving. You automatically have the line break pause; well at times, I want to run right through it. Like a red light. Take the challenge see if something its me.
Re: Friendship by Blue Magpie	9-Oct-02/9:25 AM
There are good poets here, but it is a matter of patience. I like this, especially the last stanza and the last lines. The tone shift from stanza to stanza makes it work, although I am not sure the first line is such a happy little image. I know it is supposed to be light hearted, but a snowflake hitting a nose, well, usually melts. I
Re: a comment on Drunken note #1 by blackball	9-Oct-02/12:31 AM
Successful today, not way back when...sorry, I saw the hits coming a mile away on that one.
Re: a comment on Drunken note #1 by blackball	9-Oct-02/12:23 AM
We were never not cool.
Re: a comment on Drunken note #1 by blackball	9-Oct-02/12:19 AM
Of course, you think it is good. Because it is good. It is just young and it is blowing away its intended audience. But how many successful writers are 19 or 20? There is a reason for that. Experience. It may be a cliche, it may be a stereotype, but it is everything. She has the tools and the talent. The rest with come with age.
Re: a comment on Drunken note #1 by blackball	9-Oct-02/12:14 AM
His. Yes. But mostly his novels and short stories, but he is a damn good poet also.
Re: Drunken note #1 by blackball	9-Oct-02/12:02 AM
If you come across Sherman Alexie's (he is a writer that is not dead) "Alcoholic Love Poems," read them. It might help you clear these up a bit.