Re: In the Valley of Two-Dollar Pints of Red Hook IPA by <~>	6-Nov-02/10:41 PM
But I love the title!
regarding some deleted poem...	7-Nov-02/9:19 AM
I have never read so many poems about football and its players. Have you sent them of to the players? Is it endearment or obsessive stalking?
Re: ... by logun2002ya	7-Nov-02/12:40 PM
Eye am just curious why the ellipsoidal head each and every one of your poems. Is it a stylistic choice? Is it part of your overwhelming desire to set yourself apart from the maddening crowd? Are you the sort that dresses the part of the artistic to make yourself stand out becasue your talent cannot do it? Eye am just curious to you creative process? any assistance here would be greatly appreciated to understand how I should approach this work.
regarding some deleted poem...	12-Nov-02/12:58 PM
Well I did not ache as the writer of triangle poems (she is just that kind of girl), but with a snip here and a snip there you could work this into a fine piece.
Re: There is no end by INTRANSIT	12-Nov-02/2:23 PM
Big bad universal themes written in big bad universal language just doesn't seem hunky dory. Do you read poems over the CB to all the other truckers? And after you are finished do you say 10-4?
Re: An ode to my sugar daddy, but in haiku by horus8	12-Nov-02/5:49 PM
What if the tractor is a brand new John Deere? It just doesn't work. But Aspen just was pounded with a couple of feet of snow and opens next week. Early for the first time in years!
regarding some deleted poem...	12-Nov-02/5:57 PM
First off: Laura Bush ain't no flower! As for the poem, I think it could use a bit of cleaning, especially on the grammar end. And why is it we should listen to you? That first line is awkward, explain? I also think the tone shift of the second stanza comes out of nowhere and hits the reader like, hey, dumb ass, forget the first stanza, this is what the poem is really about. But hey, if razorgrin is impressed, then this must be one fanfuckingtastic poem!
Re: L.O.V.E. by bxjay170	12-Nov-02/6:02 PM
Please, use line breaks! And this sounds a bit too much like a greeting card.
regarding some deleted poem...	12-Nov-02/6:07 PM
"Chameleon girl" is used way too many times, so is it really a poem or a lyric? But even if you removed them all, you still would have a relatively bad piece of work.
Re: No recalculations needed by Bachus	12-Nov-02/6:12 PM
Your morality segment ruins everything, but then maybe I do not have the insight to understand this sort of hard-hitting hipster thing.
Re: Gilded Stumps of Olde (AN STORY THAT IS NOT AN POEME) by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	13-Nov-02/8:51 AM
somebody it secretly pushing DA to the top. who is it and why?
Re: Child of my Buttocks by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	13-Nov-02/8:54 AM
Why it is Settle and DA himself that is who. How sad DA, how sad. I didn't figure you that way. Maybe you have died and someone took over your user name.
Re: Few Words by Tom Colebrooke	13-Nov-02/9:12 AM
What are you trying to prove here? go back to writing about football and spare us your goof rants.
regarding some deleted poem...	13-Nov-02/12:49 PM
He wrote this in 2.6589693 seconds!!!!
regarding some deleted poem...	13-Nov-02/12:55 PM
and this one in 1.111598745 of a milisecond.
Re: Wheelin' N Rockin' by INTRANSIT	13-Nov-02/4:37 PM
Does this mean you are coming to Denver? Have you been listening to Def Leppard or Steppenwolf. Are you lookin' for adventure or whatever comes your way? 10-4?
regarding some deleted poem...	13-Nov-02/5:09 PM
This poem might have been good, or might not have been good, but you managed to place a grammar mark after every sentence. In addition, that takes true talent. Maybe you should co back and let some of the line breaks work for you.
Re: ... by logun2002ya	13-Nov-02/10:27 PM
I (in the most non possessive sense) can dig it, but the ...s are killing me. Can't you number these things or something? Do you have something against that? I need clarity.
regarding some deleted poem...	14-Nov-02/11:30 AM
Did you drag this title out of you diaries in honor of Anne Sexton? Ugh! Although the poem is moving along it could still use tightening, but it is much better than the draft yesterday.
regarding some deleted poem...	14-Nov-02/12:55 PM
I cannot get the Robert Frost out of my head. I am get a bit confused by the voices - mixing first and direct. So that loses me a bit. But I like the idea and the first two stanzas completely draw me in. I think the problems for me. starts in the 3rd stanza. As guardians roused from dens long dark Scattered on legs in multiples of four, Startling, but not stopping, our unmending the wall I get this, but it seems a wordy way to say bugs craling about. Unthinking of ages -- i don't like this line. It seems obscure.