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... (Free verse) by logun2002ya (the first poem eye ever wrote)
for all my life
eye'd search the world round
for the perfect love
that in you eye've found
with that eye'll make
my love more profound
and so make me yours
forever bound
Up the ladder:
the dance
Down the ladder:
for ya haters
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Posted: November 5, 2002 10:17 PM PST; Last modified: November 5, 2002 10:17 PM PSTWeighted score: 4.3468566 Overall Rank: 13059 Comments:
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oohv @ 172.174.100.195
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5-Nov-02/11:07 PM
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I like this, it flows nicely. I don't comment much, but I liked this.
Eye hate to tell you this, but you haven't improved.
icky.
Eye am just curious why the ellipsoidal head each and every one of your poems. Is it a stylistic choice? Is it part of your overwhelming desire to set yourself apart from the maddening crowd? Are you the sort that dresses the part of the artistic to make yourself stand out becasue your talent cannot do it? Eye am just curious to you creative process? any assistance here would be greatly appreciated to understand how I should approach this work.
hmm...dont really know what your talking about...if its the "..." then eye just never write titles...poetry is about expression of feelings and just write them down...eye have more than books of em...eye wrote my first poem when eye was five...and if you are talking about the "eye"...eye is possessive and eye am not a possessive person...so eye feel that eye better explains who eye be...for my eye see all eye do as a me...all the you's eye encounter...all the beauty eye see...all the feelings eye feel, trapped in emotion and peac3...then maybe eye am just crazy...hmmm...
Thanks. I just wanted to know how you reasoned it.
lose the last bound, and it's practically normal. almost 6.??
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