Re: a comment on Revaluations by Beyond_Dreams	17-Jan-05/10:01 PM
"this person who feels alone , mind you he's a bum is watching the world pass him by" isn't a point. It's not even a real sentence. A point is something like "Now go live fully and carefreely" or "The man you've always thought was your uncle, isn't."
Re: a comment on the pretenders by PopoyMola	17-Jan-05/6:06 AM
Shut the fuck up.
Re: a comment on Peptalk in the Dugout by Dovina	17-Jan-05/6:03 AM
PS-I'm a butchier feminist than all of you together. You can try some 'look at the guys ganging up on my poem' shit till you're blue and puffing, but then I'll probably just pull out my engorged member and bludgeon you comatose with it.
Re: a comment on Peptalk in the Dugout by Dovina	17-Jan-05/6:00 AM
If either of you have ever played baseball, sat in a dugout during a baseball game, watched a baseball game on TV, or by any other means other than fiction seen a baseball player adjust himself, then I am currently eating my best hat.
Re: a comment on In the Shadows by Beyond_Dreams	17-Jan-05/5:57 AM
Is Herald the Count's name or a verb?
Re: a comment on Rain by dancin_n_da_moonlite	17-Jan-05/5:56 AM
This is a pathology of vote-grubbing asskiss.
Re: American Semele (Edit) by Sasha	17-Jan-05/5:52 AM
This would have been better if it was "American Smell". What is the American Smell? Bacon and shag carpet.
Re: Rendered Genderless by PsydewaysTears	17-Jan-05/5:45 AM
PS-I was expecting to read a poem about being rendered genderless, which I've always imagined being able to do on some impermanent basis. Unless by "eat the ham" you mean something below my capacity for contemplation, this is not even close.
Re: In The Beginning by Dovina	17-Jan-05/5:42 AM
I'm displeased to find you're back to your old self-righteousness. You were better when you didn't have all the answers. Kind of lovable, even, like a hamster.
Re: Rendered Genderless by PsydewaysTears	17-Jan-05/5:41 AM
Can you write a rhyme without it being a total nonsequitor? I bet not. The best part was the ham bit.
Re: a comment on Tra-la-la by Lifeboatman	17-Jan-05/5:40 AM
Do you know what part of a chick's anatomy the birth canal is? Do you know what grows there? Yeast, and about nothing else.
Re: a comment on Stopping at the oak (draft) by Caducus	17-Jan-05/5:37 AM
I know what a banshee is. The confusion was "haunting in the omen of" one. Presumably, you mean in the banshee's song, which is an omen of death, rather than an omen predicting a banshee itself, which would be bizarre, redundant, and require a whole substructure of meta-banshees to appear before the banshees proper. By "haunts", I imagine you mean simply "exists in a kind of scary way" which is how you used it in your comment above, so you can use "in" after (ie, "haunts in the wind") rather than the more common and understandable "haunts the wind" or "haunts the omens of banshees"). Anyway I essentially got to the person "you" haunting in the haunting song of a haunt before I got totally flummoxed. It could have been so much easier.
Re: a comment on Only Me by heartlessempath	17-Jan-05/5:30 AM
Did you think "In Country" was a very good book?
Re: Below Zero by Shardik	15-Jan-05/5:56 AM
The last part saved it.
Re: a comment on Peptalk in the Dugout by Dovina	15-Jan-05/5:34 AM
I know nothing about astrology, except that after thirtysomething years of life your Venus still seems to be stuck somewhere shamefully near to the house of Virgo.
Re: a comment on Peptalk in the Dugout by Dovina	15-Jan-05/5:30 AM
If you delete my comments you are an engorged pussy. PS-it's not astrological, fuckwad, it's television. PPS-This comment is meant only for you. Delete it if you want, but you'll still have gotten to read about what an engorged pussy you are. Twice now. PPPS-Of course you have the right to delete comments. Is that your idea of a fucking revelation? You also have the right to wear only a bandanna around your schlong, but if you do I'm going to use my right to laugh at you and you'll be really sad and wish it was your right to whemy yourself to death from the embarassment of it, which of course it isn't not even in California. Having lived abroad long enough to know several people who only have bandannas to wrap around their schlongs even in the thick of desert winter, I've come to realise one of the biggest problems with America is people saying "I've realised it's my right to do X" and then doing it no matter how poorly it reflects on their other, non-right-discerning powers of judgment. And your an engorged pussy. As always, [Captain] zodiac
Re: Stopping at the oak (draft) by Caducus	13-Jan-05/5:39 AM
1) Don't capitalise "Oak". 2) Don't put a period after it either. 3) Then don't capitalise "Laid". 4) Correctly punctuate "Nature's". 5) On second thought, don't say that at all; and don't rhyme "tomb" and "womb". 6) That reminds me: Don't rhyme "fire" and "pyre". 7) Punctuate after Frost. 8) Don't punctuate after pressed. 9) What's up with all the periods in that stanza anyway? And couldn't you have made at least one of those a full clause? 10) "You haunt me in the omen of banshees" doesn't make any sense. You'll try to explain it now. Don't. It still doesn't. That's your limit. Do you want more?
Re: a comment on Veins by helenwales	13-Jan-05/5:32 AM
Thud.
Re: a comment on Veins by helenwales	11-Jan-05/10:20 PM
'"thud" implies a kind of finality' is my favorite thing on poemranker today.
Re: The Poet's Plight by dougsoderstrom	11-Jan-05/1:31 AM
The Negro's Plight: The Whemying Lying here nude in a puddle of cack, Besmear'd on my hindparts, and phlegmy, Hidden from sight (for I'm terribly black), I'm a Negro and I................. whemy. My behavior, I tell you, is nothing so sinful: Children do it - and even Steve Buscemi Is known to go in for an occassional chin-full Of the feeling we call......... "the whemy". Driven from within, while its virtues I extol And you heathens and non-PhDs condemn me - Oh God! It's happening! Quick! Grab the bowl! It's....................................... THE WHEMY!!!!