Comments byzodiac, 1021–1040 back, including replies. Only comments on poems

on dialect by skaskowski 25 Oct 2005, 3:02 AM
A: Negro.
on MOMENTS From A Madman's Mind by PsydewaysTears 25 Oct 2005, 3:01 AM
Way to fix the title. Now what's with all the randomly capitalized words?
on Eternity by Dovina 25 Oct 2005, 2:40 AM
Woo-hoo. Mt Nebo's here in Jordan, you know. Upward, indeed. Everything except "But the opposite is true / Strength and vigor exhausted" is great. Change that to something less totally didactic and wood-tongued. Or drop it altogether. DOVINA: But that line's the whole point! ZODIAC: Exactly.
replying on In my palm by Prince of Void 25 Oct 2005, 2:33 AM
I was joking, but now it has hit me that emo fans today probably DON'T know who the Lemonheads, Pixies, Ramones or Moby Grape are. Or that a movie called Reality Bites captured their whole aesthetic the before most of them were even born.
on fox and hounds by nentwined 25 Oct 2005, 2:31 AM
Well, you were never going to be able to get away with the moon's laughter running down your thigh. Nice attempt.
replying on Incommunicado blues (fixed, except for Dovina) by zodiac 25 Oct 2005, 2:25 AM
I wish. I'm still in the hole at the bottom of the hole.
replying on Incommunicado blues (fixed, except for Dovina) by zodiac 25 Oct 2005, 2:23 AM
You never cease to amaze me. One, what about the goal of evolution? Don't tell me I convinced you. Two, for my part, I can't wait to get back home and start having babies, if only to balance out the morons so shamelessly overreproducing their dumb moron genes. I never thought I'd ever say that.
on Haven by cyan9 24 Oct 2005, 10:33 AM
Wow. This is like a dictionary of creepy words, but formatted by a post-prime Billy Corgan.
on Petals by Jeremi B. Handrinos 24 Oct 2005, 4:13 AM
"My plight for water" is worth a ten. The rest's an eight.
on Send The Devil... by horus8 24 Oct 2005, 4:12 AM
Nice.
on Ruins by Caducus 24 Oct 2005, 4:11 AM
Why sculptured instead of sculpted? As it is you have 'a statue sculptured', a verb which I can only imagine means 'made like a statue'. In other words, making sculpted 'sculptured' adds no meaning at all and eliminates an easy chance to add meaning.

On a constructive note, I think it would be helpful for you to add actual, modern details about Rome. Seriously.
replying on Marriage by Dovina 23 Oct 2005, 5:38 AM
PS-My experience is that people who aren't in relationships talk about what they'll give to a relationship; people who are in relationships talk about what they get from theirs. I think there's hope for you after all.
on Count the Days by longships 23 Oct 2005, 5:04 AM
Yeah, and I've got news for you: being a poet doesn't get you laid like it used to, when Wordsworth and Coleridge could get non-scaggy college girls whenever they wanted without waiting or foreplay.
on In my palm by Prince of Void 23 Oct 2005, 5:02 AM
You're probably too young to know that for one glorious summer the name on everyone's lips was Evan Dando.
replying on Slim and Pretty, Or Not by Dovina 22 Oct 2005, 12:03 PM
I would prefer a farsighted, who would see me clearly while distant (and thusly diminished by perspective) but not have a chance of seeing anything closer. Admittedly nearsighted is better as a metaphor. Do you think that's why so many people use it as a metaphor?

Well, everybody has keys.
replying on Farm animals by INTRANSIT 22 Oct 2005, 9:58 AM
Meaning or not, it's a sexy as hell thing to say. I've found myself repeating tongue-in-groove all week to random Arabs. Proof that submitting to the will of micromanaging Allah didn't get them all brains.
on Slim and Pretty, Or Not by Dovina 22 Oct 2005, 9:34 AM
A nearsighted man will see you clearly if you are close, and fuzzily from a distance. Are you sure that's what you meant? That aside, rather too like one of those women's-keychain jokes like, Have you ever noticed all of women's problems start with 'Men'?
replying on Marriage by Dovina 22 Oct 2005, 9:25 AM
Last I checked, I wasn't mocking your existing, functional relationship.
replying on Marriage by Dovina 21 Oct 2005, 11:23 AM
PS-Good night.

"It is difficult
to get the news from poems
yet men die miserably every day
for lack
of what is found there"

- William Carlos Williams
replying on Marriage by Dovina 21 Oct 2005, 11:22 AM
Are you serious? One, I mean the HUMAN race. Two, if I had statistics for marriage in other countries, I'd use them; as things stand (and as we're both Americans), America's a stellar example. Three, I'm saying that because 50% of marriage commitments fail, maybe there's something wrong with the commitment. Four, no, pure endurance of anything has never been worth the cost of anything. Is that what you want on your tombstone? "I endured"? Five, scoff, but I don't have to change my very conception of love to fit some outside institution, or justify unhappiness to myself. THAT'S romance. Six, it's early where you are to be so drunk. Shame on you.