| Re: My Mornings were Filled with Nightmares and Pies by T. Jonathron Remp |
29-Jul-05/4:18 AM |
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"Sweet smelling clouds Darken my skies" is the best description of the men's tent at an Arab wedding I've ever read.
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| Re: Internet Junkie by cuddlytiger17 |
29-Jul-05/4:22 AM |
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Hey, you're right. It IS so much better than reality.
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| Re: Polar Bearings by impert&ent |
29-Jul-05/4:30 AM |
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Seriously, that's kind of clever. Because the only way you couldn't draw a line around the earth to pass between two objects is if one was on top of the other.
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| Re: The Worst Poem Ever Created (edited) by drnick |
29-Jul-05/4:43 AM |
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| Re: The Worst Poem Ever Created (edited) by drnick |
29-Jul-05/4:43 AM |
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29-Jul-05/4:48 AM |
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The Arabic word for "wig" comes from the root "blessed". Interesting, huh?
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| Re: Observation of a stupéfait by Dental Panic |
1-Aug-05/10:37 PM |
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Cool. leaves', not leaves.
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1-Aug-05/11:24 PM |
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"the burdens you've borne"
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3-Aug-05/5:27 AM |
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3-Aug-05/5:35 AM |
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I just heard careless whisper twice in a row on Jordanian radio and thought, I went to grad school for this.
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| Re: SO LONG MY BELOVED by prettyktm |
3-Aug-05/5:38 AM |
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Hi, if you want to talk the language of love and peace, I'd say stop talking about "this isn't my war but I've gotta go cause a man's gotta do his duty and kill people who are just doing their duties and so on and so on". That's what lets wars happen. Personally, I'd pack up for Canada, see what they do when they don't have any more suckers to shoot out of their cannons.
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| Re: A Night at the Move-ies by Crann Mascher |
6-Aug-05/3:03 AM |
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Makes me wonder, why did you emphasize "move" in movies? Movies just means pictures that move.
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| Re: Never born. by | Broken | |
6-Aug-05/3:10 AM |
Maybe you don't want to, but if you DID want to make this poem EVEN BETTER you might make the following edits:
Breathe => breath,
Planning about your perfect life => Planning your perfect life,
dreamt => dreamed,
it to => it would,
.. => [nothing],
long => longer,
.. => [nothing],
punctuation throughout.
Just a suggestion. I really enjoyed seeing what it would be like to live pointlessly. -10-
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| Re: Sand by toward |
6-Aug-05/3:29 AM |
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...During your times of trial and suffering, when you see only one set of footprints, it was then that I carried you. IT WAS THEN THAT I CARRIED YOU!!!!1!!
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| Re: Writer's Block by shadows |
6-Aug-05/3:32 AM |
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Awkward. Ironic, huh? Congratulations on being the second poem titled "Writer's Block" on poemranker this week.
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| Re: BY ALL YOUR HEART by prettyktm |
9-Aug-05/1:43 AM |
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The actual English expression is "With all your heart". I'm not trying to be hypercritical, that just seemed important, seeing as it's your title and all.
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9-Aug-05/2:09 AM |
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Oh, are they shaming you guys at some obscure white-pantsed sport again?
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| Re: That Summer by XOXScottishgrlXOX |
9-Aug-05/2:10 AM |
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I predict your life is going to be spectacularly eventful and dramatic, and not in a good way.
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| Re: More Than The World by XOXScottishgrlXOX |
9-Aug-05/2:14 AM |
Everyone has whose problems? Don't you mean 'Everyone has his (or her) problems'? Or even better, 'Everyone has problems'?
Sorry for being nitpicky. Notice even Dovina didn't catch it. As for the poem, I wish there was something new you could say about God. You'd think, hey He's infinte, there must be an infinite number of original things to say about Him. Funny how there isn't, huh?
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| Re: Waiting Room by jessicazee |
9-Aug-05/2:16 AM |
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You're currently the best writer on the site. For what it's worth. An honest-to-goodness 10.
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