regarding some deleted poem...	24-Aug-02/1:03 AM
time waster. 0
Re: The train by Art Glocken	24-Aug-02/1:04 AM
how many chuffs when things go as scheduled? 4
Re: Too Late by ObiWonKn	24-Aug-02/1:06 AM
what can I say. 10
Re: Poem Ranker by abecedarian	24-Aug-02/1:12 AM
excellent, you shall certainly be remembered as an under-achiever, I mean underappreciated bardolater. 6
Re: My days work by lucky_cmc	24-Aug-02/1:16 AM
permit me to say this is barely articulate, if you want to get anywhere close to poetry. You're going to have to pay the big bucks. Cause after writing this you'll be lucky if they'll even allow you to read it. 0
Re: The box by Ming T. Merciless	24-Aug-02/1:36 AM
Bemuda?????
Re: Dragons by austimb	24-Aug-02/1:46 AM
Ahhh! My barbut's on fire. 0
Re: Why I want to kill Opie by Bachus	24-Aug-02/1:58 AM
not a poem but great. Facista anyone?
Re: The Ultimate~Creep goes to Mecca! by Bachus	24-Aug-02/8:42 AM
Contributing to truth telling is a vile and irresponsible thing to do. Soon the state will be forced to crash land in your living room for upsetting the local livestock. They've been eating less and less of the Company chow. Ummm. There's nothing like ma's microwave reheating. She can peel back the film like no other. No thanks, I'll have dinner in my own room again tonight, I don't want to watch what you're watching. There's a story on E! about a crazy cyber-poet who died mysteriously of an overdose. No, I don't believe in conspiracy theories. He was a lunatic nobody, and the people who chatted with him on Das Internet say he was bound to self distruct, anyone could tell he had mental problems. I don't want to miss it
Re: Black Buns by Bachus	24-Aug-02/9:05 AM
This wetback spic thinks your writing loves her. Esos monos negros son unos pinchi putos! Ole!
regarding some deleted poem...	24-Aug-02/9:42 AM
You're a smart girl to leave before these evil-spuing derelicts really tear you apart. Hyenas are always on the look out for the young who have innocently wandered onto to this hellish plain.Don't worry though, Dark Angel and that deformed outcropping of his, Razorgrin, will be dying of cancer soon.It can't be helped. It runs rampant it such creatures. It's Feeble-DNA Syndrome.The genes themselves are aware of their diseased imperfection and they self distruct the host before they can replicate. Oh the miracles of nature! There are many many poetry forums out there that are not tainted with the ugly co-dependent psychosis of this site. Leave the fighting to me,god'swife, purveyor of Justice. I am pertinacious and full of vigor. Their sniveling comments bounce straight off my golden breastplate infecting their sub-standard eyes with their very own gonorrhea laden words. p.s.... your poem is tender and revealing, it just needs some professional guidance. If you're not taking some kind of creative writing course, you should because your thoughts have merit and a dulcetness worth refining. Best of luck.
Re: One by ben	24-Aug-02/9:59 AM
Your poetry is like a babbling brook of insightful wisdom. 10
Re: One by ben	24-Aug-02/9:59 AM
Your poetry is like a babbling brook of insightful wisdom. 10
Re: Tainted by necroscope7	24-Aug-02/10:08 AM
the thing I like best is your descreetness it not stating what the taintor is, Could be any kind of vice. You'll has a typo and mixing of the metaphors clean with fire is considered wrong in most circles but if you're comfortable with it then leave it. 7
Re: THEIR MOCCASINS by ani	24-Aug-02/10:19 AM
This is really swett,. You should develop it into a story. It has the ring of Lore to it. I'd love to see you add some more scenes of the couple together in their first life. You know, little vignettes. 10
Re: she did not by mitchski	24-Aug-02/10:43 AM
Her eyes seemed borrowed conveys alot of information. I appriciate that kind of frugality. In my overly critized oppinion this could be a better short story then poem. On second thought your use of {she does not,I did not} wouldn't translate. oh well keep it up. 7
regarding some deleted poem...	24-Aug-02/10:46 AM
eminds me of Richard Braughtigan. Have you read any of his poetry? Not that I think your ripping him off, I just like talking about him. 10
Re: constructed word poem #6 by david	24-Aug-02/10:52 AM
silent but hesitant doesn't gell. can't something be silent and hesitant? otherwise 7
Re: Turnarounds by dilips_10	24-Aug-02/1:58 PM
Honesty makes up for so amyn mistakes. 8
Re: Turnarounds by dilips_10	24-Aug-02/2:01 PM
I made a mistake. "amyn" is suppose to be many. Honestly!