regarding some deleted poem...	24-Aug-02/2:05 PM
No one is bound to playing by your rules. Your vanity dictates to no one. A person wrapped up in himself makes a very small package.
regarding some deleted poem...	24-Aug-02/2:43 PM
Be mindful young lady. Many a wood nymph has fallen prey to my brother. Don't sip from his cup, or you'll have hordes of Satyrs abusing your orrificium. Dionysus, honestly you're my youngest brother and you know I have a stronger fondness for you, but really you are shameless! No Ambrosia for a week! Take my advice Jade, least he turn you into a maenad. Very disreputable
regarding some deleted poem...	24-Aug-02/2:58 PM
Put who off the scent? Your invisible audience? No one cares. You rationalize your cruelity as being the raison d'etre of poemranker. You're doing the literary world a great favor I'm sure.Maybe some day you'll have the balls to leave a comment on one of my poems, though I doubt it. I not only have a right to my own honest opinions, but I have as much right to confront you as you have to confront the meek. Justice shall be served. Selah!
regarding some deleted poem...	24-Aug-02/3:36 PM
Meanwhile back at poemranker, Dark angel is taking his time trying to compose a rebuttal to match god'swife genius. Alas poor Angel, He hasn't a hope in Hell. And the clock ticks on...
regarding some deleted poem...	24-Aug-02/3:56 PM
Once again you are dictating the rules by which this game is supposed to be played. I even have to argue in the Dark angel format or else it's meaningless. You contradict yourself. you make comments about me as if you have some idea of who I am. Which is exactly what you are accusing me of doing. I can do what i want when I want and it doesn't have to make sense to you! Get It? Vive la Libertad!
Re: St. Germain & The Charismatically Uncomitted by <{Baba^Yaga}>	25-Aug-02/10:19 AM
This story is a festival of jocularity. It's sooo long, I don't know how you gentlemen get through the editing of these Epics. How these visions appear in your mind will also always be a mystery for me. My imaginations looks extremely jejune and humdrum standing next to yours. I going to assume you meant to spell Germain Germane, so this is pretty much flawless. I love the pageantry of it. I'm glad I took the time to read it. It broke the morning's tedium, and put a smile on my face. Thanks. 10
Re: CoffeeNoBody by webguy	25-Aug-02/10:29 AM
The use of the nouns as adjectives in lines 14 - 16 is inventive and works well. It conveyed to me the sense of seperation between body and soul. The 'are but' in line 2, and the 'are all but'in line 6, sound archaic in this contemporary poem. Maybe you placed it there as a contrast. It does kind of weigh the piece down a little. the last stanza ties the everything together. Nice train of thought. 8
Re: Life's Motive by kazeaki	25-Aug-02/10:35 AM
If it's left to think too long, or if it's allowed too think to long, in the 4th line would make it easier for the reader. The 3rd stanza is so strong it could even stand on it's own. 8
Re: Glory Bound by kazeaki	25-Aug-02/10:55 AM
Last 3 lines exemplify the power of good poetry. Much in little. Meditative. Makes me feel worthwhile. I get stuck on the idea of glory having victims. 7
Re: Sunshine by alexander	25-Aug-02/11:08 AM
You're so positive. Wonderful. I've been through some trials just like everyone else so this philosphy of striving for happiness is near an dear. 10
Re: Sweet Dreams by MistressSnow	25-Aug-02/11:10 AM
You got question marks were your astericks should be.
Re: What Does it Mean to be Human by Sterling5583	25-Aug-02/11:17 AM
Sometimes we Gods envy you humans. You may want to correct the misspelling of equation in the 2nd line. I can't put my finger on it but it needs some more development. I just woke up I'll try looking at it again later. 5
Re: Life On Earth by dougsoderstrom	25-Aug-02/2:02 PM
I apologize for being rude. i'm embarrased by that first comment I left a few days ago. The point I was trying to make is it's better to use allegory if you want an emoitional response from your audience.
regarding some deleted poem...	25-Aug-02/6:01 PM
I appreciate your commenting, and I'm not trying to be confrontational, but could you tell me what's wrong with sentiment, seriously I want your opinion, and what could be done to make you give this poem a higher rating. Theoretically, of course. I looked up sentimental, and it says characterized by or showing emotion or refined feelings.
Re: A piece i shall never play again by ==Doylum	25-Aug-02/6:04 PM
You got a knack for rhymning. Not enough sentiment though.
Re: Esplanade by Wulf	25-Aug-02/6:16 PM
Why does the word Esplanade have to do with this? An esplanade is open public space. Does it have another meaning I can't vote without some clarification
Re: Our lord and saviour, the land of 60 million micks, as wonderful and noble as the pink empire. by ==Doylum	25-Aug-02/9:24 PM
Doylum I recieved your comment, and sent you a reply. I saw them both in the comments page and now they've disappeared. Anyway thank you for replying and if you could point out which common phrases, besides thick as thieves, I used in the poem. I try to be as unique as possible but after so many thousands of years of story-telling in human culture it's not so simple. If you have the time please let me know. Also I noticed it's even difficult for the humorist onboard to write without using well worn phrasiology, espacially of the piratey kind. Studied Persona? What happens if they find you actingreal, or I guess I should say not acting at all. Don't worry I won't tell.
regarding some deleted poem...	25-Aug-02/9:43 PM
Hello Annie welcome to poemranker. I just arrived a week ago myself. theres a lot of mischievious goings-ons around this site so if someone slams you don't take it seriously. 'The strong stench of death' seems out of place. The hero/heroine seems to be talking from her room so that line made me believe she had cancer or something. I can't see the connection between stench and depression. Enlighten me.If you edit out the definite article "the" from lines 3-10 (example: hallow walls, empty view...) there would be more drama. Good luck.
regarding some deleted poem...	25-Aug-02/10:05 PM
See Annie I tried to warn you! (look at one of your other poems for my comments) Pay no attention to the heartless cynics on this sight. They seem to be only inspired by any opportunity to slit a throat.
regarding some deleted poem...	25-Aug-02/10:09 PM
Previously I left you a very long comment on how to edit this poem done nicely, but it got eaten by the system and I don't have the energy to type it all in again anway if you'd like, contact me and we can talk about it. Again DO NOT LET ANY NEGATIVE COMMENTS AFFECT YOU most of the people who leave them are more interested in soynd clever then helping anyone out with their craft.