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Tainted

Member since 2002 · Posted 6 Jun 2002 · 5 comments

Dark in thought Heavy of soul Every day You fight the pull But escape is not to be No help to be found Destroying yourself As you go round and round Something is wrong And it won?t go away It was there all along Since that damnable day You try to atone But your conscience denies it You?ll never be clean That fire has already been lit One act has doomed One who may have been sainted Now you sit used Thrown away and tainted

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[6] deleted user 12-Jun-02/9:02 PM Reply

Although I would like to say something rude about your poem, it is clear that you aren't a naive poet . This poem is extraordinary, I like it.

[n/a] necroscope7 13-Jun-02/12:53 PM Reply

Wow, thanks, I appreciate the compliment. I know I can be a bit harsh at times with my own comments, but i just try to be honest and straightforward, as i would hope for anyone else to be with me. i know my writing is farfrom perfect, and if people don't like it I want to know and i want to know why. It can be hard not to take it personally, but I know it will help to make me better at my craft in the long run. so in the same vein I hold no punches. maybe I make some people not like me, but hopefully by being honest I can help them to learn from things and become better themselves.

[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 13-Jun-02/5:06 PM Reply

My comments can seem harsh at times. But that's only because I am deliberately trying to insult you. I hope that this will give me great pleasure and hell, we might even learn a thing or two about self-esteem along the way.

[7] god'swife 24-Aug-02/10:08 AM Reply

the thing I like best is your descreetness it not stating what the taintor is, Could be any kind of vice. You'll has a typo and mixing of the metaphors clean with fire is considered wrong in most circles but if you're comfortable with it then leave it. 7

[4] not_a_philosopher 3-Apr-05/10:56 AM Reply

your overwrought rhymes destroys what you might have had hear