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Tainted (Free verse) by necroscope7

Dark in thought Heavy of soul Every day You fight the pull But escape is not to be No help to be found Destroying yourself As you go round and round Something is wrong And it won?t go away It was there all along Since that damnable day You try to atone But your conscience denies it You?ll never be clean That fire has already been lit One act has doomed One who may have been sainted Now you sit used Thrown away and tainted

god'swife 24-Aug-02/10:08 AM
the thing I like best is your descreetness it not stating what the taintor is, Could be any kind of vice. You'll has a typo and mixing of the metaphors clean with fire is considered wrong in most circles but if you're comfortable with it then leave it. 7




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