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Free verse № 119

Too Late

Member since 2001 · Posted 16 Mar 2002 · 7 comments

The sterile cotton sheet is pulled No one is here, but me, and maybe you I wonder if you're watching me Stumbling over what to do She said it was time I stayed in bed a little longer Till it was too late Now blood rushes to my head My legs are growing weak I caress your calloused hands Through tears, I cannot speak There's so much I want to say So many things I want to change Your blue eyes Brought the color to my own Tell me, how, at 17, I'll ever make it here alone Because I don't know

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[n/a] deleted user 16-Mar-02/1:21 AM Reply
I got the call in the middle of lunch. Been there. The thought is strong, but the images are/language are not really memorable, except maybe "No one is here, but me,/ and maybe you".
[10] anonymous 20-Jul-01/3:38 PM Reply
Ahh, very interesting.
[10] anonymous 26-Jul-01/4:07 PM Reply
This read to me like a depressing inside story. Brings me back to all those highschool dramas I never took part in.
[10] anonymous 14-Sep-01/8:54 PM Reply
speaks to me.
[n/a] nentwined 16-Mar-02/1:21 AM Reply
"she said ... till it was too late" stumbles, and I'm not sure what you're saying. I presume the person died, but I've no clue the relation or really what that meant except perhaps abandonment...
[7] Sigh'ense... 30-Jul-02/3:59 PM Reply
how sad
[10] god'swife 24-Aug-02/1:06 AM Reply
what can I say. 10