Re: Legend by ThoughtfulSoul	22-Dec-02/12:49 PM
Once again a universal theme thwarted by lack of story. How did you stubble upon these revalations? that's what you need to be writing down. How you feel or what philosophy you have developed is only the theme, which because we all share these insights is a very boring read. Give me the account of what happened, I was not there, and so am interested in your experience. I am not interested in you telling me how you feel, but what caused you to feel. What dream? I want to know your dream, not your evaluation of it
Re: Laughing all the way to the playground by w~* ATHENA *~w	23-Dec-02/2:10 AM
Hijole this is a piece of shit! Mainly because there are some terrific ideas forsaken by pompous look-at me-I'm-an-originalisms. You have made your thingy here completely in-accessible, congradulations. Too bad you can't use your abilities for making even the slightest sense. Try, it not all that uncool.
regarding some deleted poem...	23-Dec-02/2:15 AM
So let's see if I understand...you hate your mother because she would pull your foreskin back when you were three and rub around your penis with a alchohol soaked Q-tip. It stung terribly while at the same time being the most erotic experience of your entire life. Is that pretty close?
Re: can't go back by brazen	23-Dec-02/2:18 AM
Que pendejada.
Re: Sickness by blkarak	23-Dec-02/8:09 AM
Waht a strange poem. "In your face" is oddly out of place. Your point is clear but the prose doesn't flow at all. If your serious about this poem you need to re-write it. I am especially fond of lines 10-24.
Re: The Coming Light by poetandknowit	23-Dec-02/7:03 PM
Did you just write this after our conversation? I remember 'tricked light' from some other poem, was it yours?
Re: Truth at last by w~* ATHENA *~w	26-Dec-02/2:36 AM
Get some sleep.
regarding some deleted poem...	26-Dec-02/2:42 AM
Is this an attempt at looking back? Or just some tabloid titilation? You made the whole thing up, just for flash.
Re: corners by rockinindividual	27-Dec-02/9:59 PM
I read this last, you make reading these easy and enjoyable. There are some small things that might do better if they were changed, But the telling, the telling is almost flawless. I like your poems.
regarding some deleted poem...	29-Dec-02/12:16 AM
wow
Re: what I saw at work today by Bill Z Bub	29-Dec-02/12:25 AM
Did you throw him in the can and close the lid?
regarding some deleted poem...	29-Dec-02/1:28 AM
Does this mean -={Dark_Angel}=- is never coming back?
regarding some deleted poem...	29-Dec-02/10:03 AM
Something in the first few lines in the last stanza, sounds corny. I little to formal or something. Where have you been?
Re: me, Deep-as-a-puddle and the elusive connection by lunar	29-Dec-02/10:10 AM
After reading this I begin to imagine you are decieving me. Maybe you are someone else, pulling my leg. "Were the sun does not shine" means up your ass were I come from.
Re: The Eskimo and the fish by INTRANSIT	30-Dec-02/8:03 PM
I think the title is mis-leading, this has nothing to do with the relationship between the man and the fish. Find another title. Is this about being a provider, or is this about the freedoms of simplicity?
Re: Prelude to a Legend by ThoughtfulSoul	30-Dec-02/9:22 PM
How does light fall less on deaf ears than on the ears of the hearing? You seem like a passionate person, always necessary for a poet, but your poem is too much about what you feel, and too little about what happened. Life is a confusing and difficult thing, except of course those secret moments. What has your sub-conscience created? By the way, I think it's a bad idea to place a line break after 'sub'. How about just 'This light that brakes through the bitter black, is my only compass'?
regarding some deleted poem...	1-Jan-03/1:39 PM
I think using what speaks to you, is an important key to creating art. These seem to be the voices in your head, that's a tool I like to use me, that voice. Put this away and work on it. By what I can gather you are going through a powerful moment, I for one would love to see art that can express such feelings, but there is still too much anger, so put it away. It has its humor, and that adds a little kindness to it, but then the moment looses all it's dignity.
Re: strange beds (1989) by Bill Z Bub	1-Jan-03/1:52 PM
Great potential. Very sexual, great, that's what you're talking about anyway. 'Touching her halo' Is this a part of her body, or a something mystical? Please don't make a real woman into a goddess, let her be real. Take away her halo, and I believe all the rest becomes that much more meaningful. It's just my opinion, and since I really no nothing about the story behind this I may be all wrong. Anyway it turned me on.
Re: Rant by blkarak	1-Jan-03/8:50 PM
Give me some examples.
Re: unsent by Bill Z Bub	1-Jan-03/8:57 PM
"Maybe were just close friends..." til the end ofthat stanza is pretty much the entire poem. "Rough chin" my personal favorite. I don't believe the more in love the worse the writing. Without inspiration we are lost. It just a matter of seperating the wheat from the chaff. I serious about that one stanza being the poem. Take all the other stuff away and see if it stands up.