| Re: Kites, Gunpowder, and a Chair by Geschäftsreise |
15-Oct-03/11:42 AM |
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| Re: Nudesflash by ?-Dave_Mysterious-? |
15-Oct-03/6:19 PM |
Funny as hell; very clever!
my favorite: "*Nude thirds of all nudely-weds cannot afford to buy a nude home, a nude
survey reveals. âWeâre thinking of emigrating to Nudefoundland,â say Mr
amd Mrs John Nude."
(it's still nude a God Damned sonnet...)
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| Re: The first Poeme by Everyone by Everyone |
16-Oct-03/2:15 PM |
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16-Oct-03/2:18 PM |
The cadence is addictive, clean and well done. Thanks for the ride.
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| Re: Blue Collar Beat by Big Daddy |
16-Oct-03/2:20 PM |
fairly engaging.
and in interesting format.
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| Re: paper fragments by skaskowski |
16-Oct-03/7:18 PM |
This is quite nice; flowing, roaming within an easy pattern.
Having said that, I'm gonna haveta read it a few more times to figure out what the hell it's about - but, you know what? - I look forward to it.
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| Re: Tabula Rasa by skaskowski |
16-Oct-03/7:24 PM |
Writ with a confident, skilled hand that pulls words as concepts onto stacks with a geometric efficiency.
Once again, I have to work to understand what shape this equation takes - but I want to.
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| Re: two tunnels blip out by skaskowski |
16-Oct-03/7:27 PM |
I'll grant that it's probably clever - though it may sound more so than is so; I do, however, appreciate the unusual form.
The other two: sapphires; this - more muddy. I will admit, it can be fun to play in the mud.
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16-Oct-03/7:31 PM |
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"Hey kids, this chess song hits the big top twenty at number 7!"
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
17-Oct-03/7:47 AM |
I like the sounds in this alot.
Couple things to consider: delete "up" (it's covered with "phallically")
Tell me what kind of trees are looming.
That second stanza, in particular, has a nice groove.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
18-Oct-03/8:00 AM |
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in your search for perfection, you have coded out existence; congratulations.
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| Re: Sonnet or Limerick? by ?-Dave_Mysterious-? |
18-Oct-03/9:10 AM |
SEE now that's a SONNET!
I knew you could do it.
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| Re: broken by GekoHawaii |
19-Oct-03/7:18 AM |
okay, I was tolerating the expression because the meter is perfect up to stanza three.
I think, too, btw that you've just barely straddled the comfortable side of unforced rhyme - so, not bad in that regard.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
19-Oct-03/2:37 PM |
I like the first stanza as it flows around strangeness and a subtle rhyme.
I just have nary an idea of what the hell this is about. Was he doing something his pans becuase it rhymes with hands??
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
19-Oct-03/2:39 PM |
defending against, maybe?
it may be disjointed, but were you smoking 'dis joint, or a fatter one??
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| Re: You'd sell more hats, mugs, and shirts if they said... by Shardik |
19-Oct-03/2:45 PM |
who is James - who are you, and why do I have to read about either of you??
"bequeeth" is "ea", but I think you meant "beseech", unless you were saying it as he might, presumably as wrongly as you? No idea.
to eath his own.
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19-Oct-03/2:47 PM |
very nice.
A little klang, some nice mirrored sounds, unusual wordings - excellent.
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| Re: Devour by leviathan |
19-Oct-03/5:37 PM |
very sad. lots of sadness. sad sad sad poem.
I've written them, you've written them...
what else ya got?
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| Re: Decay by INTRANSIT |
20-Oct-03/12:39 PM |
Very sexual; made me think of a chastity belt.
and with an excellent cadence.
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| Re: what i thought i was thinking by FreeFormFixation |
20-Oct-03/12:52 PM |
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