on Kites, Gunpowder, and a Chair by Geschäftsreise
15 Oct 2003, 11:42 AM
most excerrent.
on Nudesflash by ?-Dave_Mysterious-?
15 Oct 2003, 6:19 PM
Funny as hell; very clever!
my favorite: "*Nude thirds of all nudely-weds cannot afford to buy a nude home, a nude
survey reveals. “We’re thinking of emigrating to Nudefoundland,” say Mr
amd Mrs John Nude."
(it's still nude a God Damned sonnet...)
my favorite: "*Nude thirds of all nudely-weds cannot afford to buy a nude home, a nude
survey reveals. “We’re thinking of emigrating to Nudefoundland,” say Mr
amd Mrs John Nude."
(it's still nude a God Damned sonnet...)
on The first Poeme by Everyone by Everyone
16 Oct 2003, 2:15 PM
squishy
on some deleted poem
16 Oct 2003, 2:18 PM
The cadence is addictive, clean and well done. Thanks for the ride.
on Blue Collar Beat by Big Daddy
16 Oct 2003, 2:20 PM
fairly engaging.
and in interesting format.
and in interesting format.
on paper fragments by skaskowski
16 Oct 2003, 7:18 PM
This is quite nice; flowing, roaming within an easy pattern.
Having said that, I'm gonna haveta read it a few more times to figure out what the hell it's about - but, you know what? - I look forward to it.
Having said that, I'm gonna haveta read it a few more times to figure out what the hell it's about - but, you know what? - I look forward to it.
on Tabula Rasa by skaskowski
16 Oct 2003, 7:24 PM
Writ with a confident, skilled hand that pulls words as concepts onto stacks with a geometric efficiency.
Once again, I have to work to understand what shape this equation takes - but I want to.
Once again, I have to work to understand what shape this equation takes - but I want to.
on two tunnels blip out by skaskowski
16 Oct 2003, 7:27 PM
I'll grant that it's probably clever - though it may sound more so than is so; I do, however, appreciate the unusual form.
The other two: sapphires; this - more muddy. I will admit, it can be fun to play in the mud.
The other two: sapphires; this - more muddy. I will admit, it can be fun to play in the mud.
on some deleted poem
16 Oct 2003, 7:31 PM
"Hey kids, this chess song hits the big top twenty at number 7!"
on some deleted poem
17 Oct 2003, 7:47 AM
I like the sounds in this alot.
Couple things to consider: delete "up" (it's covered with "phallically")
Tell me what kind of trees are looming.
That second stanza, in particular, has a nice groove.
Couple things to consider: delete "up" (it's covered with "phallically")
Tell me what kind of trees are looming.
That second stanza, in particular, has a nice groove.
on some deleted poem
18 Oct 2003, 8:00 AM
in your search for perfection, you have coded out existence; congratulations.
on Sonnet or Limerick? by ?-Dave_Mysterious-?
18 Oct 2003, 9:10 AM
SEE now that's a SONNET!
I knew you could do it.
I knew you could do it.
on broken by GekoHawaii
19 Oct 2003, 7:18 AM
okay, I was tolerating the expression because the meter is perfect up to stanza three.
I think, too, btw that you've just barely straddled the comfortable side of unforced rhyme - so, not bad in that regard.
I think, too, btw that you've just barely straddled the comfortable side of unforced rhyme - so, not bad in that regard.
on some deleted poem
19 Oct 2003, 2:37 PM
I like the first stanza as it flows around strangeness and a subtle rhyme.
I just have nary an idea of what the hell this is about. Was he doing something his pans becuase it rhymes with hands??
I just have nary an idea of what the hell this is about. Was he doing something his pans becuase it rhymes with hands??
on some deleted poem
19 Oct 2003, 2:39 PM
defending against, maybe?
it may be disjointed, but were you smoking 'dis joint, or a fatter one??
it may be disjointed, but were you smoking 'dis joint, or a fatter one??
on You'd sell more hats, mugs, and shirts if they said... by Shardik
19 Oct 2003, 2:45 PM
who is James - who are you, and why do I have to read about either of you??
"bequeeth" is "ea", but I think you meant "beseech", unless you were saying it as he might, presumably as wrongly as you? No idea.
to eath his own.
"bequeeth" is "ea", but I think you meant "beseech", unless you were saying it as he might, presumably as wrongly as you? No idea.
to eath his own.
on some deleted poem
19 Oct 2003, 2:47 PM
very nice.
A little klang, some nice mirrored sounds, unusual wordings - excellent.
A little klang, some nice mirrored sounds, unusual wordings - excellent.
on what i thought i was thinking by FreeFormFixation
20 Oct 2003, 12:52 PM
a flash of inspiration.