Re: Strange Days, Indeed by Bachus	21-Mar-04/4:42 AM
You should reneame this "Reflections of a College Freshman".
Re: Beah Richards by Jeremi B. Handrinos	22-Mar-04/5:02 PM
You call me your N----r and then write a piece like this....extolling the virtues of Beah Richards. Again your work displays a form of hypocrisy that is quite tasteless. Beah was light years ahead of her time...a proud and strong black woman who was an accomplished actress, poet and playwright. I remember seeing her as a kid in “Guess Whose Coming to Dinner”. She was class and dignity personified. Anyway, I can see you tried to capture her essence here…but in the end you fell well short of your mark. In particular, I found your statement about her voice (“ the purist colored voice”) awkward and ill conceived. You are capable of doing much better than this. –6- on technical merit…..8 on heartfelt emotion…..-7- overall
regarding some deleted poem...	24-Mar-04/10:36 AM
And the obsession with Jesus by those who do not believe continues on, and on and on...... If only those who claim to believe were in posession of such passion and sense of commitment.
Re: Jesus Rises from the Grove by wilco	10-Apr-04/4:24 AM
Jesus, liar or lunatic... a very old very played out story. Jesus the ficticious product of a band of religious fanatics seeking to break away from classic Jewish tradition.....a theory posed by securalists more than 400 years ago. Nothing original here just the usual obsession with Our Lord and Savior by those who claim to be non-believers...interesting, very interesting.
regarding some deleted poem...	10-Apr-04/6:40 AM
I really enjoyed this. Nice work. -10-
Re: Rough draft of a poetry manifesto by zodiac	10-Apr-04/6:55 PM
Interesting piece from the pen of the most active and "stuffiest" commentator on Poemranker. I remain unmoved but munificent -6-.
Re: A Proclamation to Our Lord by Joe-joe	26-Apr-04/7:27 AM
It's nice to see that even the pagans and heathens among us are well versed in the word of God. Some day, perhaps, the light that has so profoundly changed my life will be shed upon their retched souls that they may know His glory and find true peace in their lives. For the enemy of man is man, in that he has chosen not to see that which has been revealed to him but instead to deny his own nature and declare war against his own soul. He has suffered the price of his self-imposed blindness….a history marked by murder, plunder and untold violence and suffering. If only he could see as I have seen! Surely this would put an end to his decline and, as I have, he would rejoice in the goodness of God and come to see the rich inheritance that lies within his grasp. My fellow Rankers….I shall cease to pray for you only after you have stood beside me on the mountaintop and tasted the fruit of our loving Father.
Re: saltwater bath by J.B. Manning	28-Apr-04/4:22 PM
The Law of Diminishing Returns asserts that marginal gains in profit begin to decrease at a certain point of production and that this reduction continues as more output is produced until marginal gains are actually negative (negative returns). I believe that this princiiple is actually at play with regard to your work which continues to be highly fragmented and disjointed, lacks originality and is agonizingly melodramatic. It all smells so much like a sorry assed soap opera...Hey but who am I to judge you .....my writing sucks too. Peace Joe-Joe
Re: "Joseph, Joseph" by Joe-joe	29-Apr-04/2:42 PM
Horus, I agree. I'll need to give it somne more thought. Thanks.
Re: "Joseph, Joseph" by joe-joe	29-Apr-04/2:44 PM
Horus, I agree. The buns are not totally bad but there certainly is quite a bit of room for improvement. Suggestions are welcome. Thanks.
Re: deviant conveniences by J.B. Manning	1-May-04/1:10 PM
JB, Why the infatuation with the vile and depraved? There is more to life than unencumbered sexual desire. Your writing could be so much better if not for your lack of emotional depth and maturity.
regarding some deleted poem...	2-May-04/6:05 AM
I like this but disagree with its premise. Women hold all the cards...always have, always will.
Re: Samurai by SupremeDreamer	2-May-04/6:06 AM
Payback is a bitch, isn't it?
Re: I have Learned to Let Go by Joe-joe	24-Dec-04/6:04 AM
After hours of pondering, I've opted for theory number 1. Yes, all poets are dim and all poetry is nonesense, some are just dimer and more nonsensical than others.
Re: I have Learned to Let Go by Joe-joe	24-Dec-04/6:08 AM
Hey Zodie, lighten up...or are you still upset about that little wild goose chase I sent you on a while back... you can attack my writing all you'd like but the fact of the matter is that I could sell you ice in the North Pole if I so desired. I wish you and your family a wonderful Christmas and a Happy New Year!! Peace Joe
Re: Untitled by http://mulberryfairy	29-Apr-05/2:01 AM
Hello Mulberry. I hope all is well with you. Why the orientation change? Why not just find another man?
Re: Racism by Dovina	30-Apr-05/4:13 AM
Some of the wording here is a bit cumbersome but your story rings true and conveys a very powerful and important message. How many friendships will never be known because of the doubt and reluctance you describe? I enjoyed reading it. -10-
Re: Construction Lot (edit) by zodiac	3-Jan-06/1:32 PM
The city kids must have moved to the suburbs because a "fence" could never keep one of us out of our favorite play grounds. On one hand you suggest that something was built on the lot, on the other you paint a picture of an empty lot surrounded by a fence. Which one is it? The last paragraph is vague at very best. Are you attempting to highlight the common man's powerlessness in the face of “progress” or your own sense of indifference?
Re: This Is Me by PoeticXTC	3-Jan-06/1:41 PM
A bit too much on your subject's physical features. I thought you were going to contrast the strong and self-assured outward appearance of your subject with an ego more fragile than most would think. Having said that I thought the last line was really good...although I would say that vanity is higher on the sin chain than envy.
Re: Sunlighting by ALChemy	5-Jan-06/5:45 AM
Al, Very nice. I love the way you flip traditional perception in the first line. It sets the tone for the balance of the poem which creatively describes the dawning of day while playfully personifying the relationship between moon and sun...at least that's the way I read it. Joe