Re: Anouk by daniella	25-Jul-03/4:13 AM
Interesting metaphore... but it works... thats what poetry is all about... making that which often doesn't work find a way to work.
regarding some deleted poem...	25-Jul-03/4:20 AM
Very good. Love the wording... understood it all to well. Showed how what you want sometimes isn't what you keep wanting after you've got your wish.
Re: Those Crazy's people in my brainsky by Shardik	26-Jul-03/5:22 PM
I'm confused... but you made me laugh so all the better. Skipped from one thing to another.. but if you were trying to make the reader laugh and be confused you've managed... nice job.
regarding some deleted poem...	26-Jul-03/5:25 PM
Seems a hateful subject... I'm going to take a guess that perhaps its somewhat about the war? With the America remarks thats what I get from it... kinda telling everyone to mind their own business stick it up their ass and let all thats well go on if they can't then may the same bad luck come to them that came to the states. Metaphore is a great thing... as is poetry... each reader can come to their own ideals. Keep up the writing and good luck with it all.
Re: To Lesley by Bahookie	26-Jul-03/5:28 PM
Holding a persons heart in your hand, caring only about them? Don't care about yourself because your obsession lies within and upon them? The feel of their skin makes your hands burn sensually? Short and sweet... nothing wrong with that. Thought I'd let you know what I got from your poem... see if I was right in how I read into it. If not I'd like to know what it was that you were thinking with your words.
Re: wandering, north by <~>	26-Jul-03/5:31 PM
nice poem... makes a person think... thats what writing is all about. Keep on writing because those of us the feeling and those of us that refuse to feel are the ones that have created language.
regarding some deleted poem...	26-Jul-03/5:33 PM
Made me smile... didn't really reread to find meaning behind it... but it made me smile... half way through I thought to myself "I can relate." Keep on writing...
Re: I Am a Snob, or, 'A Definition' by JakeBike	28-Jul-03/6:25 PM
Everyone does start small... even after writing years and years its nice to go back to the roots and see if the simplisity (spelling) is still there. Often times its hard to get back to your roots. My first poem I ever wrote was back in 4th grade... short...sweet...simple. Here it is... May we never depart, May the love always stay true. Shall it not stay, Can destiny discover that we were made for each other? May life lead us the right way. Please hold on.
Re: As the Redwood Ages by DurtKL	28-Jul-03/6:27 PM
Nice... not sure the whole meaning of the poem... but do we the readers truely have to understand to still enjoy poetry? Keep up the work and keep on writing.
Re: One Moment to the Other (v2) by nentwined	28-Jul-03/6:29 PM
Nice poem... gives a message but also stays hid. I like poems that can't be fully understood leaving the reader room to fill in the gaps as the see fit... thats how some of the best poetry ever written has been. Keep up the good work and keep on writing.
regarding some deleted poem...	28-Jul-03/6:57 PM
Great poem... it allows the reader to look in and see what is going on. I enjoyed it... made me think of a poem that I wrote about a night I had just a few days ago :) Waiting to be able to post again so that I can post the poem up for everyone else to read. Night poems are some of my favorites, I think because the night is "unknowning" not being able to see as you can in the day, so words help to understand and to be able to see past the darkness. Keep up the good work. One comment you said something about having to be older to be able to understand, not so much age as having that feeling of maturity and love. Watching someone at their most imperfect times and finding the perfection and love in those times. Thinking to yourself... "This...this is the person... the person I could spend the rest of my life with... the rest of my life together...with this person." Sorry about all the dead rests in the quote but I'm sure you understand the reasoning... as it was thought not spoken.
Re: Oxywarmonger by poetandknowit	1-Aug-03/8:47 AM
Interesting poem... but after reading the comments... if its not a war poem or an anti-war poem... umm what is it? *confused as normal*
Re: Reminders... by loneshadow29	4-Aug-03/5:17 PM
I can feel it. Been that and had those feelings. Hurts to see the one you want more than anything walk away and out of your life. Hurts even more when you know they want the same things you want just can't have them. Reasons for not being able to have them due to the time of meeting in life. Such as both heading to different states for college. My heart feels for the pain and love which you speek of. Keep on writing and good luck. (Was giving 7 but here's 8 because I felt the pain spoke about.)
Re: Return to Darkness... by loneshadow29	4-Aug-03/5:25 PM
Loving the vocab sounded like some of my own work. Didn't see any repeating words where something else could have said the same thing. (I hate poems that use the same word to describe something over and over) It was very good... but I had a few spots I had to read over because it didn't quite flow. "fallen into shadow" end of line seven should be "fallen into shadows" Here is a 9 keep up the good work and keep the pen on the paper flowing out languages unknown :)
Re: Paintball's Flight by loneshadow29	4-Aug-03/5:48 PM
I'm not much about Haiku's but you do give good vision about painballs. I'll give a 9.
regarding some deleted poem...	6-Aug-03/7:11 AM
A little bouncy but it always seems to come back into the court. Makes the reader think one thing then tails away from it at the end and really doesn't follow the first part. But the ideals are great. A little editing and praze will be all yours. Its not yet... but has the strength to be... 10
regarding some deleted poem...	7-Aug-03/3:26 PM
Very nice use of words. Keep up the good work, I inspired you earlier so now perhaps you've inspired me.. but I think I've already wrote to many night, darkness, sun set, sky, and stars/moon poems. Another one couldn't hurt anything I guess. Only so many times I can say something without saying it the same way though :P *hugs* Thanks for sharing your poem with us all :)
Re: A Poem For World Peace. by GAY AS FU*K	9-Aug-03/2:27 AM
Spent some time on this one I can see. Nicely done and I agree with most the points you made keep up the good work. -10-
regarding some deleted poem...	9-Aug-03/2:35 AM
The poem does have a very nice flow to it till you get to poof ! Bring the reader in, give them the ending they want... made the picture clear. First verse/stanza (what ever you want to call it) doesn't seem to fit. Maybe I'm missing something... if you use imagenation it fits... but I think I like it better without. (If you can explain the first part to the rest I would be grateful, would love to be able to understand) Keep on writing and keep the good work flowing. -8-
regarding some deleted poem...	9-Aug-03/11:11 AM
I agree with the other comment. Its short, simple and does have its own little charm about it. -8- Keep up the good work and keep on writing :)