Re: a comment on How A Panhandler Kills by SupremeDreamer	21-Aug-03/5:29 AM
cmon now, dawnsons creek? i admit its a its a bit soap opera, but cmon DAWNSONS CREEK? i think ill go shoot myself.. ;/ I dont see how its strange that a tramp is happy and content with his life, ive met tramps like that actually.. they exist, then again your right, its really conflicting with him being poor and begging for money. happy you enjoyed it.
Re: quarter-step (abridged) by richa	21-Aug-03/5:24 AM
what want ?? er.. perhaps a typo?.. over all the poems vague, it doesnt make much sense to me. I think you need to cook this slightly longer. I'll give my vote later.
Re: a comment on Trailer Park: Diary of a Hayseed by DreamerSupreme	21-Aug-03/4:48 AM
insightful? -shrug- i think you are one of the most stubborn bastards ive ever met.. but whatever, you got the goddamned point, and i can stop hammering it in.. (self note: why??? WHY DO I DO IT?? im a closet masochist perhaps??? bleh.) Thank god you dont actually think your a fatherly figure, otherwise my energy has been used to educate the deaf, blind, and retarded, but unfortunately not mute.. heh. Best possible person you can be.. be yourself. Help others, thats always good.. whats good is also knowing if you can help them, or whether its possible.. anyway, this is where my comment ends, before i ramble like an insect.
Re: a comment on The Belgian Bookworm [revised] by DreamerSupreme	21-Aug-03/4:30 AM
made it slightly tighter. about those gaps though, point those out please.
Re: a comment on Trailer Park: Diary of a Hayseed by DreamerSupreme	21-Aug-03/2:36 AM
I'll do you a favor: ill be less assholic than usual for you.. [i feel like im giving in..] but dont be fooled, im going to be fucking harsh, and i wont always be polite.. infact, actually, im going to be blunt.. like always.. cept i wont be so rough.. ok? BTW, you have a fucking strange idea about poetry requiring profoundness.. which is idiotic. poetry isnt only bible versed you narrow minded tramp.. jeez. Its about: Imagery, Expression of emotion, creative presentation using metaphor, simile, rhyme, meter, etc.. its taking people to another universe, its offering alternate views of life, or it can be about provoking a reader, causing him/her to think, or to simply piss them off. its alot of shit.. not much of it has anything to do with how PROFOUND THE STUPID POEM IS.. profound is upto the reader dick.. you know why? because the way you write a poem decides whether or not it affects the reader in anyway.. profound or not.. ok, im done with my long and detailed speech.. take it or leave it, but do yourself a favor and dont just wave it off as juvenile babbling, its fucking stupid to make assumptions..
Re: a comment on Trailer Park: Diary of a Hayseed by DreamerSupreme	21-Aug-03/2:36 AM
COMMENT CONTINUED: ez-board poetry forums are basically workshops where poetry is critiqued, and theres alot of line by line revision and suggestions involved.. including people rewriting whole poems.. in a nice and polite fashion.. i go there for ideas, and to better myself in the mechanics of poetry.. I post here on poemranker to understand the soul of writing, and to be pushed around like a little punk so i get stronger, and perform better in writing.. and ive learned alot, from my enemies and my friends, though i dont let most of them know that, i play stubborn, bitch, moan, make jokes and play my chosen role. About mr pig, yeah, hes a nice polite english gentleman, a damn good poet. But i havent gotten much advice/crit from him.. actually, none at all, but thats beside the point. Z.. heh.. look man, Z made fun of my shit while giving me a dominatrix whipping session when she didnt think i was writing to my full potential, and it wasnt POLITE.. ok? it was fucking rude.. ;) You should do less whining, and take advantage of the shit i say to you.. and ive given clues here and there.. you just need to look. Im actually being all nice.. just to get a point across.. yes, your that fucking stubborn.. LuckyJoe wasnt this fucking thick skulled.. Do me a favor btw, stop talking down to me as if i am some child, i might be younger than you, but that has nothing to do with my experience in life, or what i know.. I dont need some fatherly friend to save my ass when im not even in danger. And: GROW THE FUCK UP. yes, do that by WIDENING your vision.. stop thinking in such a fucking narrow fashion.. ignorance is being unwilling to understand. Try to fucking jerk your brain out of that static way of life and start exploring the world around you.. just because you learned to think this way due to the life you lived doesnt mean its the fucking only way, and definately doesnt make it the best way.
Re: a comment on Trailer Park: Diary of a Hayseed by DreamerSupreme	21-Aug-03/2:35 AM
Its not what i chose to make it, thats how it was when i came here man.. and theres no need to get all angry about it and be all high a mighty saying you dont want to play with the monkey, when your the hairy ape that doesnt comprehend the universe that you fell into. You know, about my game needing to be worked on: ive been working on it since i was 13, and continue to do so, i have not stated EVER that theres nothing i need to improve upon. And dont worry about my progress, its doing quite well, I have leaped my ass across hurdles in my writing and have become stronger as a poet.. and i did with help from this website.. you want to know HOW the folks here at poemranker helped me? They fucking spanked me silly, crushed me into pieces, laughed at my work, called it shitty, etc etc etc... I got clowned 20000 ways from sunday.. and you know what? It caused me to evolve.. and i continue to evolve.. because i had every asshole on this site making my life hell. I WAS being constructive man.. i turned that one poem of yours into a complete joke while stating exactly what was wrong with it, except you never took it seriously, didnt even think about looking at it carefully to see what i was saying. Your telling me i need to work on my game? lol.. pal, i can write more creatively than what you can fart at the moment.. no, im not the most creative, original, or amazing writer around, if that was the case i wouldnt be here... well actually, i probly would because well.. i love this place. and, about being brutally honest.. cmon now.. thats exactly what i was doing.. do you think i actually take the time to parody someones work if i dont think they could possibily write better? pffft.
Re: a comment on Trailer Park: Diary of a Hayseed by DreamerSupreme	20-Aug-03/3:05 PM
joe-joe, i parodied your one piece as a complete constructive crit.. in other words: it was unoriginal, cliche ridden, and full of crap... held NOTHING concerning value for the reader.. ok? here i dont do line by line crit in a nice fashion, because this aint the ezboard poetry workshops.. its the fucking jungle.
Re: Under a better bed wetter by Shardik	20-Aug-03/2:37 PM
as always, you made john look like a moron.. course, you could of left it unparodied.. it speaks for itself lmao. 10.
Re: a comment on Trailer Park: Diary of a Hayseed by DreamerSupreme	20-Aug-03/2:29 PM
happy you enjoyed it.
Re: a comment on Trailer Park: Diary of a Hayseed by DreamerSupreme	20-Aug-03/2:18 PM
joe joe, ive seen your type of shit 100000 times. you shouldnt talk. ;P
Re: a comment on Stargazing Illusionist by DreamerSupreme	20-Aug-03/6:13 AM
.... too long? short attention span man? WANT A METH INJECTION!??? ;/
Re: a comment on Stargazing Illusionist by DreamerSupreme	20-Aug-03/6:03 AM
LSD, Salvia, Ibogaine, MDMA, 2ct7, amt, 5-meo-dmt, 5-meo-dipt, 2cb... yeah, my medicine closet. dont forget about the grass and huge collection of bongs.. oh and the 200 dollar bag of meth..
Re: a comment on Stargazing Illusionist by DreamerSupreme	20-Aug-03/5:53 AM
No..
Re: Icecream Soul by LuckyJoe	15-Aug-03/7:00 PM
wheres the beef? milky ice cream drippin, looks like your masterbatin.
Re: a comment on Sir Psycho Sexy by DreamerSupreme	15-Aug-03/6:57 PM
firebird? sweeet. newp, im not crystal lane swift, cmon now, im not much for nick name games. ;P not upto much, other than smoking off my bong, drinking tequila, and thinking bout my soup metaphors.
Re: a comment on for sue (20030815) by nentwined	15-Aug-03/3:46 PM
explain bish. ;/
Re: a comment on Sir Psycho Sexy by DreamerSupreme	15-Aug-03/3:42 PM
hah. neither, he was just a fool in a metal suit. ;P hows your day?
Re: a comment on Sir Psycho Sexy by DreamerSupreme	15-Aug-03/3:32 PM
thank yew. ;)
Re: a comment on Stone Slave by DreamerSupreme	15-Aug-03/3:05 PM
what beehive did you piss on this time man? lol.