replying on Always by hobojo
2 Jan 2009, 11:21 AM
Stop saying "I am a terrible writer.". You are good when you decide you're good-- confidence has many merits, and they are boundless. Doubtless you'll look back at the old pieces and shake your head in wonder as to how you conjured that shit up-- the weak points like bleeding bulletholes: Revise, twist, take risk, push your concepts as far as possible. Even failure is success when you take that and rewrite your blueprints having learned your particular strengths and weaknesses. You'll come to learn what works and what doesn't, it'll become instinctual. Pursue the thought that "I'm fuckin liquid fire flowing beneath the crust waiting to erupt." and write. Don't try, DO it, and do it relentlessly.
replying on 2012 - The Haiku Remix. by DreamerSupreme
2 Jan 2009, 5:53 AM
Holy shite, there be life here in the ghost-town known as rankerville!
replying on About Death & Hell? Hell can be a State of Living. by Don-Quixote
15 Dec 2008, 7:45 AM
Your welcome. Take the anguish and conjure up the soul-- it is painful but, none-the-less, necessary.
replying on About Death & Hell? Hell can be a State of Living. by Don-Quixote
15 Dec 2008, 7:43 AM
Tom, you know my fucking name. It's Lee. The same name I had when we were shooting up heroin in the bushes lining the chapel we camped at in Portland. !DOH!
replying on Suicide Note [Disposal Instructions Included] by SupremeDreamer
15 Dec 2008, 7:34 AM
You'd never be able to find my hiding spots boy. You're addressing a professional steetbum, not a shoddy poser, you silly child!
replying on Suicide Note [Disposal Instructions Included] by SupremeDreamer
15 Dec 2008, 7:32 AM
That's how I'd like to kill myself if I decided that that was the best option left to me. Sorry if that's too boring for you.
I can characterize it and make it the suicide of a bisexual transvestite who is obsessed with occult ritual if you'd like. Being odd is not a difficult task for me. ;)
I can characterize it and make it the suicide of a bisexual transvestite who is obsessed with occult ritual if you'd like. Being odd is not a difficult task for me. ;)
replying on Suicide Note [Disposal Instructions Included] by SupremeDreamer
15 Dec 2008, 7:25 AM
Do your damned job and consume the weaklings. They're all-over the fucking rankerville dragging their wet blankets and spewing hallmark emo-love-thy-neighbor-and-honor-his-virg
on Broken Heart by Luul A
15 Dec 2008, 7:03 AM
Oh god, what a wet blanket dripping bedpee all-over the fucking place. What the fuck is wrong with you?
on Dancing with the Devil by Liam Wallace
15 Dec 2008, 7:01 AM
Don't question the meaning of the dance. Dance and let the meaning express itself.
You get a three only because I like the title and you display a wee-bit of cleverness.
You get a three only because I like the title and you display a wee-bit of cleverness.
on A Way With Words by LARoundtree
15 Dec 2008, 6:57 AM
Take your hallmark style cliche and that didactic expression of a lambs vacuous ethic and go back to your "happy place". Stay there and don't sully the taste of those who sustain themselves on a diet of meat & cold glasses of reality. If you don't? You'll be the next chop that I devour in an act of savagery.
on Marrakech Watercolours by Caducus
15 Dec 2008, 6:47 AM
It's got soul. More soul than I posses.
on when light cannot see your face by daggatolar
15 Dec 2008, 6:44 AM
Apparently you also can not write either. Stop grasping for the appearance of profoundness. You haven't gripped upon anything but the air and your own literary flatulence.
The use of the word like in the manner you've employed it above? Don't. Saying "will forever last" in a vain attempt to avoid saying the tired "will last forever"?
Don't. Repetetive redundancy? Eliminate it. If it's constant, then there's no need to say it'll last forever.
Do not ever cheapen what you are trying to express in such ways. You need to reconsider the way you go about constructing your poems. Become thy editor motherfucker!
Consider this:
You are the
eternal sundown
setting,
the distant rain
pouring down,
an ocean wave
receding-- lingering
in the distance just
beyond my grasp.
You are the ever-present
reminder of pleasant memories;
maintaining the sadness,
making me yearn for the past.
Yesterday has long since passed,
but you're still here,
always.
--That's just a quickie example. Notice the difference?- Clear, fluid, with a crisp finish.
It's not what you're saying, it's how you say it. Capiche? Find thy style and, by god, develop it.
Don't. Repetetive redundancy? Eliminate it. If it's constant, then there's no need to say it'll last forever.
Do not ever cheapen what you are trying to express in such ways. You need to reconsider the way you go about constructing your poems. Become thy editor motherfucker!
Consider this:
You are the
eternal sundown
setting,
the distant rain
pouring down,
an ocean wave
receding-- lingering
in the distance just
beyond my grasp.
You are the ever-present
reminder of pleasant memories;
maintaining the sadness,
making me yearn for the past.
Yesterday has long since passed,
but you're still here,
always.
--That's just a quickie example. Notice the difference?- Clear, fluid, with a crisp finish.
It's not what you're saying, it's how you say it. Capiche? Find thy style and, by god, develop it.
on Surreptitious merchandise and company held here by A. Nomaly
15 Dec 2008, 2:12 AM
The ending seems purposely designed to confuse. That or you were seized by an epileptic episode.
on Realizations by hobojo
15 Dec 2008, 2:09 AM
Life sucks the soul right out of a ripe tit don't it?
on Daydream Delusions by hobojo
15 Dec 2008, 12:49 AM
The ghosts of our dreams grip us with the fingers of eternity... they are our real addiction- that which we see yet can not attain.
Do not allow the misery or intoxication to warp thy craft with pimple-like amateurism. Seek to use these aspects of your mental enviroment to focus and sharpen the blade utilized in the execution.
No Vote.
Do not allow the misery or intoxication to warp thy craft with pimple-like amateurism. Seek to use these aspects of your mental enviroment to focus and sharpen the blade utilized in the execution.
No Vote.
on Rap? Hip-hop? What has this thing become? by DreamerSupreme
23 Apr 2007, 8:38 PM
Like Nas said: Hip-Hop is dead.
replying on Ode to Brittanyy and her Dyke Jacket. by DreamerSupreme
23 Apr 2007, 8:10 PM
I know, I know...
I'm a bad, bad man; what can I say?
I'm a bad, bad man; what can I say?
replying on Depth of Illusion by Beyond_Dreams
31 Jan 2005, 8:38 PM
Maybe they should award me the apathy harness.