| Re: Loneliness by Cha no Onna |
13-Apr-02/12:57 AM |
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I think this has too many different images glommed into one for me, too much going on. rain == sky tears == sky is crying... tears are bleeding... so rain is rolling off the flowers... jeweled fishnet? a spider's web? outside the window. I think with all the extras tossed in, the meaning is less powerful.
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| Re: Cosmic Imbalance by Modulo |
13-Apr-02/12:58 AM |
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| Re: Quandries of a Summer-night's Green by Modulo |
13-Apr-02/12:59 AM |
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| Re: Moon and Azalea by Aidaho |
14-Apr-02/11:50 PM |
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| Re: For fun by Cha no Onna |
17-Apr-02/7:31 PM |
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very cute. I don't know the silverstein you're referring to, so I don't know how much apology is necessary. :)
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| Re: For fun by Cha no Onna |
22-Apr-02/8:57 PM |
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just to clarify, as it seems I've give a couple folks heart attacks: I know who shel silverstein is. I don't know the particular poem that you're "ripping off". :)
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| Re: in love with jane doe by crin |
23-Apr-02/12:16 AM |
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| Re: solace by crin |
23-Apr-02/12:16 AM |
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this has a really nice pounding flow. :)
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
23-Apr-02/12:19 AM |
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this disappeared?! trying to track down; it looks like several poems have disappeared, possibly due to the glitch a few nights ago. #$&^#*$&. :(
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| Re: Dammit by Cha no Onna |
23-Apr-02/12:42 AM |
argh!?
please tell me it's not due to poemranker crashing. please?
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
23-Apr-02/2:04 AM |
is this supposed to just be "la -> lk"?
:whee: :)
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| Re: My Sun by T. Becquerel |
23-Apr-02/3:07 AM |
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
23-Apr-02/3:08 AM |
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| Re: click by crin |
23-Apr-02/3:30 AM |
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interesting... a little disjoint for my taste.
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| Re: in love with jane doe by crin |
23-Apr-02/3:31 AM |
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fixed the disappearedness. sorry your edits were lost...
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| Re: funny man by roses are read |
23-Apr-02/5:53 PM |
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| Re: all sex by roses are read |
23-Apr-02/5:54 PM |
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I take this very darkly; I'm not entirely sure it was meant that way, but it sounds like incest or pedophilia or some such. very vague. it has a good rhythm. :)
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
27-Apr-02/9:56 PM |
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just verifying comments still work...?
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| Re: Results by T.Becquerel II |
27-Apr-02/10:05 PM |
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
27-Apr-02/10:35 PM |
I agree, but... I don't see this as a poem, quite.
[and it's == "it is"; its == possessive]
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