regarding some deleted poem...	1-Sep-03/9:59 AM
im wondering.. why does this need to be a seperate poem altogether?... 6
Re: Peach (Revision) by http://mulberryfairy	1-Sep-03/10:01 AM
Ok, i like the idea, but i think you could have better crafted this into one poem with a much stronger impact. doing the fancy splitting up didnt offer anything but a bad handicap to your poem. 8 for this one.
regarding some deleted poem...	1-Sep-03/11:30 AM
And, despite my request for the fraud to give his response/report has been answered only with silence. This is the same lame bastard who has always spoken of doing mature discourse.. now he doesn't seem to take any pleasure in doing so. Now, we know his retardation. silence speaks for itself. (im laughing, really: dejavu..)
Re: Voting on PoemRanker by LuckyJoe	1-Sep-03/1:06 PM
genius.. kiddo, your poetry does not look like the work of brilliance, and weed certainly wont help.
regarding some deleted poem...	3-Sep-03/12:01 AM
"Lying as close to her as space will allow, He puts his palm on her swollen belly, She shivers, rolling in to him, And her tears drench her pillow." why is she crying? "His kisses cover her neck and shoulders, All night through, until dawn, Their joy cannot be contained, Her eyes close as the sun rises." What is going on? are they making love? are they happy about the baby? did jesus suddenly come down and tell them they were having the second messiah? .. well? "Sometime, in the mid-afternoon, They rise together, sleepy-eyed, He cooks her breakfast like always, She sips her milk and just smiles." sips her milk? now i think the mother is the kid. im getting all confused. this isnt good, course everyone says im stupid, but i dont think im talking out of my ass here. "When it is time for the doctors, He will never leave her side," -how nice, cliche to the max. "He watches as his son takes his breath, And cradles his wife in his arms." -now they suddenly are at the hospital.. wow, time goes by fast. hes cradling his wife? is she the baby? or just very small? how does her husband manage this when she is on a hospital bed? "As the years go by so quickly, Their little family grows, She thanks the Lord daily, And Daddy does as well." "She" who? it takes me awhile to figure out thats its mommy your yappin about, and this ending sucks, its sugar coated cliche from hell. The title made me think it was a poem about a childs love for daddy or something, the beginning didnt manage to give me an overall understanding or sense of direction concerning where the poem is going to lead to. its all a jumbled mass of corny emotional goo that im sure you would get paid well for from hollywood producers. blessed with 3
Re: Sugar Daddy (Free Curse) by Pystal Cocaine swifter than You. by Bachus	3-Sep-03/12:14 AM
good parody, made it as nonsensical as crystals poem, but unlike hers, it had class and humor, making it worth a million daddy -pregnancy- poems loaded with Van goo labeled with the trademark company name "Emo Slushy" advertised daily with the nice catch phrase "Mush is good when you have no teeth!" made fun of by oversexed teenagers snickering "toothless mouths are better suited to suck drooling snakes" not many true barbarians like you exist my friend, but quantity is not needed with all the vicious brutality you posses. Blessed with 10.
regarding some deleted poem...	3-Sep-03/12:41 AM
Why do you ask cliche questions that are common of the well-known "why am i such a bad person" character? why do you title your poem. "a poem"? do you not care about people knowing what your poem is about, or do you just like to let people try to figure this out by themselves? Does being vague qualify one for being a poet? no, and it is not an artistic trait untill it serves a purpose in art. This is not a poem. It is a badly written letter. I object to having such filth displayed among poetry, I am enraged by such horrid dilutation of divine art. May you suffer for your sins, may you beg Nemesis to deliver unto you a swift execution, which means a few minutes will be deducted from your 2 month torture in preperation for the headman to release you from your mortal coil. Until that holy day of justice arrives, you will be cursed with the numeric value of ZERO.
regarding some deleted poem...	3-Sep-03/12:48 AM
I repeat, once again, you no longer have any ability to make me laugh, or smile, nor snicker. you are so pathetic, that i do not even pity you, since it would be a waste of my time. "Your a burnout." Stop attempting to prove to everyone that you havent outlived your value on poemranker, its only making it clear to everyone that you have.. zero.
regarding some deleted poem...	3-Sep-03/12:52 AM
Crappy ascii art. No pride to be seen, because this has no detailed work done to it.. i want smoke coming out of the chimney, i want a door that isnt a blank opening, i want windows that show little people doing something, like havings sex, jerking off, reading, doing a puzzle, SOMETHING. go back to your mother and demand to be spanked. this must be done as soon as possible. zero.
Re: Undefined Infinity by InvertedEar	3-Sep-03/1:01 AM
"I knew we both wished this photograph lasts to eternity" huh? maybe this would work better: I knew we wished this photograph to last an eternity. hrmm? dont you think this makes more sense? overall, i like this, but its a rough draft in my opinion, it needs to be ironed out. Blessed with 8.
regarding some deleted poem...	3-Sep-03/1:23 AM
Fools weep at mortality, the death of illusion. Wise men await death, and do not fear being released from the physical, for they know that to be born in a dream is a gift more valuable than any other. and why is it a gift more valuable than any other? because in a dream, all gifts and wonders are possible, and can be attained, for one only needs to give it life. What is the lesson in all this mumbo jumbo? Mortality is an illusion, and "wise" fools spend too much time calling life around them a trick of their mind. Reality is what one deems it to be. Life is short, there is no time to question stupid mysteries, there is only time to enjoy the story before the book ends and the writer starts another.
regarding some deleted poem...	3-Sep-03/2:15 AM
Just a note: I do not take credit for the story, i am aware that it is an old one, i simply have made use of it to make a point.
Re: There are only wolves, and sheep, and moon dance by Jeremi B. Handrinos	3-Sep-03/2:20 AM
Um.. well, im left thinking "durr.. huh?"
Re: There are only wolves, and sheep, and moon dance by Jeremi B. Handrinos	3-Sep-03/3:08 AM
hrmm.. ok, i get it now, but a question: is the confusing jibber here and there the mental breakdown of the mans mind as he goes through the process of death? ex: We are yes we are are we yes blessed with 8.
Re: White Veil by J.B. Manning	3-Sep-03/4:13 AM
um.. ok.. some things here are included to add that "wow.." which doesnt make me go "wow..". 6.
regarding some deleted poem...	3-Sep-03/5:07 AM
Hrmm.. if i could get a copy of the original, i could have my brother compare and tell me if this is a good translation. Good poem though. (He was born in Belgium, so his first language is french. And smart asses beware, belgium has two major languages, flemish _and_ french. My blood is pure walloon.)
Re: When He's In Me by J.B. Manning	3-Sep-03/5:29 AM
nice revised edition. 9.
Re: R.O.X. by InvertedEar	3-Sep-03/5:36 AM
Hrmm. blessed with 7. Do you only write erotic poetry btw?
Re: The empty room by INTRANSIT	3-Sep-03/5:40 AM
short and simple. i also think the inversion suggestion should be utilized. though, im not sure about the message.. my first thought is: "god does not forgive. he is also sadistic, and left jesus in heaven alone." anyway, heres a 7.
Re: hip hap pap by Garrett S Sexton	3-Sep-03/6:20 AM
... did he pinch your cock with his teeth? ow.. tsk.. sexton, sometimes you post poems i like, other times, you just get me wondering if you were droped alot when your were a baby. but thats ok. 3