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Undefined Infinity (Free verse) by InvertedEar
Sliding the sheets far down to get a glimpse of your face
I knew my hand has passed a smooth detour, when,
in the dim space I found your eyes carefully reaching into mine.
Those fervid moves upscaled our desire
Intense yet placidly rocking the waves of euphoria
Our souls elated while our bodies grind
Transforming the flesh into a warm clay of madness.
Continuously fleeting yet submerging in a state of grace,
You hummed admiringly - agreeing to surrender the moment to a blissful
encounter
as our minds flared to raise the temperature
to a degree where only gods can sing
in this instance wherein perfection is not undefined.
The moon, our evening fire, laid out the hazy monotone of darkness
yet in that picture,
we clearly conquered our beings by driving down the winding road
inching our way to a place of endearing enchantment
where limbs tighten fiery bonds,
tongues sweeten our damp skin,
and our breath satiating the need for air.
We are everywhere but outside ecstasy
But we deem it not nearing a closure
For both of us have allowed the evening fire to highlight this dim space
And mark our silhouette of solid curves
With an assurance of not leaving the sheets unmoved-
this exists now as a gate to discovery.
But in this imagery too lucid yet still a fantasy,
I knew we both wished this photograph lasts to eternity.
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Arithmetic Mean: 3.6666667
Weighted score: 4.8410625
Overall Rank: 10653
Posted: September 2, 2003 11:42 PM PDT; Last modified: September 2, 2003 11:42 PM PDT
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huh? maybe this would work better:
I knew we wished this photograph to last an eternity.
hrmm? dont you think this makes more sense?
overall, i like this, but its a rough draft in my opinion, it needs to be ironed out.
Blessed with 8.