| Re: Ambiguous Love Poem For A Girl I Once Knew by poetandknowit |
19-Aug-02/7:06 PM |
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p&k--who were you referring to? i most certainly did not give you a 0.
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| Re: Ambiguous Love Poem For A Girl I Once Knew by poetandknowit |
19-Aug-02/6:55 PM |
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why, p&k! you surprise me! i will read this one again. i liked it very much after a first glance. nice job. your other stuff seems shallow, paired with this pithy (and maybe a little self-pitying, which is understandable) piece.
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| Re: Posing A 'mission (A Haiku Triad) by gay |
19-Aug-02/6:51 PM |
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ha ha! the blade turns to me! parry away, sir. you have met your match! (well done)
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| Re: purple by youngweirdo |
19-Aug-02/6:46 PM |
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this poem damages my thaughts.
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| Re: Grace by Win |
19-Aug-02/6:45 PM |
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this is tender, and sweet. lucky you.
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| Re: The Ultimate~Creep goes to Mecca! by Bachus |
19-Aug-02/6:34 PM |
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yes. it definitely would sound better over a pint ot two. so long as we're talking on the telling of it, the bit about your dog disjoints, but not in an effective way. some sort of transition is needed to work it in literarily... like, another glass of ste. emillion, perhaps... miss me today? i sure as hell did. i like being outside, though, and i worked my ass off today.
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| Re: The Ultimate~Creep goes to Mecca! by Bachus |
19-Aug-02/6:12 PM |
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that's quite a confession, h.
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| Re: fear by pitchblackdisaster |
19-Aug-02/6:56 AM |
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| Re: fear by pitchblackdisaster |
19-Aug-02/6:50 AM |
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i'm only 9. i'm the reincarnation of seamus heany. the pope's going to cannonize me, even though i'm not catholic, for my contriburions to the arts. did i mention that i'm a prof emeritus at the sorbonne? that's why. oh, and one other thing, if you don't want criticism, don't submit your work to this site. i gave you clus; you give me sarcasm. right back at you, babe.
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| Re: Expeditions by Nicholas Jones |
19-Aug-02/6:41 AM |
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| Re: Powder Blue by [mojo] |
18-Aug-02/12:40 PM |
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you got yer mojo werkin' here, man.
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| Re: Arachnid by quantumenterprises |
18-Aug-02/11:57 AM |
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| Re: Puddle by PawnedTidal |
18-Aug-02/8:56 AM |
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i sense a theme running through your poem, dear. it's not just the lonely man who stains the sheets alone. go someplace else. stop wearing black. bathe in the ocean on a moonlit night. but not in florida, or the sharks will get you, and we'll be deprived of your future oeuvre.
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| Re: Reno by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
18-Aug-02/8:52 AM |
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what's up with that? i saw your response, and i was surprised, to be honest, because it felt like you went raw when you answered, and then he comes trotting back with the salt and gives you a nice brisk wire-brush rub-down. usually, you don't get so personal. you even apologized to the guy. and now he's yanked everything. true colors a little to glaring here? man, everybody sees who everybody else is between their words. didn't you like what you saw, EW? it was that haiku he wrote about friday night escapism, wasn't it? it was a good poem, i thought. but, as usually the battle verbose was more gripping. don't be askairt, EW. repost.
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| Re: Dear Ms. Sexton by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
18-Aug-02/6:25 AM |
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ta h. i'm off to paint the room red.
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| Re: Reno by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
18-Aug-02/6:20 AM |
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7-7-7 for the others, and this one's called reno. coincidence? i think not. you give yourself away with the last, here. did you mean to? and the dangling letters, are you just flaunting it to get the bile a-flowing on the dark side? back to the poem--why not tie them all up at the end? i like neat packages, and you are using more structure with b^y, so why not take it the next step?
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| Re: Dear Ms. Sexton by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
18-Aug-02/6:15 AM |
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ah. unrequited love. the unattainable. the longing. the despair. the consequences. have you seen that online site with painitng by schizophenics? gud stuff there.
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| Re: Thornapple the Babyfat by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
18-Aug-02/6:07 AM |
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liked this one. more crisp than the others' writings. but, i guess that's what you were going for with this mask, sybil my dahlingk
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| Re: sky by youngweirdo |
18-Aug-02/6:02 AM |
morning B, B^Y, h, whoever you are today. i like B^Y's stuff. it meters bouncily.
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| Re: ''*Night*'' by youngweirdo |
18-Aug-02/5:59 AM |
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oh, i get it, it's just meant to waste our time. SAY SOMETHING, DAMMIT
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