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fear (Other) by pitchblackdisaster i hearby call my friends to fear,
as silence comes nearby right hear,
its thaughts dwell deep,its mind is weak,
its frail thaughts try to capture me,
it comes in the night,
it it comes in the day,
its fear in itself,
it will come at bay,
it makes blood boil red,
hearts beat wild,
it shall be the death of all mankind,
their conscience tells them to do certain things,
and it influences everything.
Up the ladder:
Reality
Down the ladder:
Bathroom Angel Crusade
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Posted: August 15, 2002 1:25 PM PDT; Last modified: August 15, 2002 1:25 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.7310586 Overall Rank: 11800 Comments:
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-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 81.86.113.159
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15-Aug-02/2:40 PM
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If only you'd included 'beak' as a rhyme to 'weak'...so is this poeme about Cthulhu or what?
good idea maybe i should re write it because i have other things that i could add to it to.and no it isnt about that....but it could be if u wanted it to
Cthulhu would be offended.
Honestly "fbab"... you write a poeme about thoughts that dwell deep, try to capture people, and are fear itself, and you claim it's not about Cthuluhulhllulhuhuhlu? For shame!
I'm going t o explod. How fucl did AHP Loveasctyf think of all that a
i dont understand any fucking thing that you guies have been sayin could you please refraise what you just wrote in the way you would if you was sayin it to a child please 4 me.
f-babe, do a search. how old are you, anyway, that you don't know that the silver platter is a myth? ah, i see, you do not realize that you are guided from the depths...
i am 14.what do you mean by the rest of the stuff that you said.do a search for what?
if the desire is great enough, you will find a way to know it. always, there is a price for knowledge
how old r u?
thanks for the advice blake.
sounds like horus8 has been dissin everyone at the moment. nearly every comment he gives it is always bad.i think he needs to look at his own poems before he starts dissin ours dont you think so?
zzinnia you must be realy clever because you are able to spot mistakes people are making and stuff like that where did you get it all from? your brilliant.
i'm only 9. i'm the reincarnation of seamus heany. the pope's going to cannonize me, even though i'm not catholic, for my contriburions to the arts. did i mention that i'm a prof emeritus at the sorbonne? that's why. oh, and one other thing, if you don't want criticism, don't submit your work to this site. i gave you clus; you give me sarcasm. right back at you, babe.
and stuff.
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