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sky (Other) by youngweirdo I
used
to sit
and wach
the sky,as
if it was like
family,but then
one day the rain
came down,and
filled the
sky with
envy,
I
quickly
dashed and
ran inside,and
wached the sky
break down,each
tiny raindrop
is like a
piece of
sky,
Falling,
Falling
Further
And
Further
Down.
Up the ladder:
The train
Down the ladder:
sermon
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 4.5555553
Posted: August 18, 2002 5:20 AM PDT; Last modified: August 18, 2002 5:21 AM PDTWeighted score: 4.7777777 Overall Rank: 11331 Comments:
your sayin that my poems are fucked up.
have you seen your own. i mean what the hell is happening there?
I didn't know this was an arts and crafts site also. your rain drops? are incredibly droppish? and your writing is....easy to "get". I guess. But poignant none the less. I suppose?
you tried harder with this one, but you're still not saying anything.
Good morning Z..It's morning ..right? I am truly mother's beach towel..coming mother..she heard that.
morning B, B^Y, h, whoever you are today. i like B^Y's stuff. it meters bouncily.
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i swear man your poems are fucked up.
what sort of shit is goin on in that head of yours mann?
oh and what the hell happened to the first I? is it meant to be there or what?