regarding some deleted poem...	16-Nov-02/8:28 PM
single flowers are my favorites. the red ones. the backs of the petals are a pale veined greenish white, like a luna moth--another of the sturdy beauties. california giants. i can get them to grow 4 feet tall, and bloom long past when they should, giving them shelter and heating them with stones. crush them gently, and their rough blooms will whisper wicked fragments of the truth. they like a ruby glass vase. gracias, amiga.
regarding some deleted poem...	16-Nov-02/8:33 PM
are you sure she is neon hues? because that's the only part of her i don't recognise. how so the neon? it seems too bright for her; she read as flooded in shadow. even the sound the neon conjures--it jars me--insectlike and constant. i feel her fading, waiting. can i not see her? apart from that one 4 letter word, this rocks. esp the canyon conjuring.
regarding some deleted poem...	17-Nov-02/6:34 PM
this is reactionary; you are too close to the loss to construct something that fits what you feel. pieces of it work--but that is not what you need to know. give yourself some time. write pages of angry spume--in those boothes that p&k loves so much, even, if you have to--just get it out. then take it apart and put it back together again, and make it hurt. then all the little jackasses can give you zeros because you write so tritely of things that touch you. do i sound bitter? nah...
Re: listen by daniella	18-Nov-02/6:31 AM
are you by chance a coal miner's daughter? creepy. nice.
regarding some deleted poem...	18-Nov-02/12:33 PM
i feel like i want to check the authenticity of this at urbanlegends.com
Re: Faith... by loneshadow29	18-Nov-02/12:34 PM
couldn't you write about trees or fishing or murder or something?
Re: Boy I Know by Goose	18-Nov-02/12:36 PM
damn. i am fresh out of tissues too. oh well. the crocodiles can have em. maybe change the first line to '25 going on dead'?
Re: The beauty of a bird by mozac	18-Nov-02/12:37 PM
you ask too many questions. and no clews are forthcoming. bah.
Re: The Breathing Dead by Caducus	18-Nov-02/12:39 PM
i think you meant 'pillar' of salt, but it sounds like you cried over her until you had a pillow of salt, which is strangely satisfying to the unrequited side of me. fix your last line, okay?
Re: Haiku Gymraeg by Nicholas Jones	19-Nov-02/6:40 AM
translation please?
regarding some deleted poem...	19-Nov-02/10:29 PM
howza bout a colon instead of a semi in the penultimate line, b.o.b.?
Re: Orange Hills (Villanelle) by Moss	20-Nov-02/7:53 AM
if only there were a 'near-vilanelle' option. i am disappointed you call it one and do not deliver. i'll come back and reread when less jaded.
Re: The Sea by Moss	20-Nov-02/7:54 AM
ooohhh. yesss. well done. have a ten, for your insight.
regarding some deleted poem...	20-Nov-02/2:00 PM
i wonder who this poem is about? i never test the waters either. as would i, you jumped in so quickly, and there were currents aplenty. he's no gulf stream, i give you that. the man is everywhere at once, and there is no xanadu or shangri-la on his map. i'm actually rather fond of the churl. i don't think he's either actor. i don't think he's flesh and blood at all. he's an eddy. enjoy the spin.
regarding some deleted poem...	20-Nov-02/2:35 PM
no cupcake for you, cupcake.
regarding some deleted poem...	20-Nov-02/6:53 PM
oooh-wee. that's smoothe.
regarding some deleted poem...	20-Nov-02/8:13 PM
lose all the "a"s. they are extraneous.
Re: Night-mare by INTRANSIT	20-Nov-02/8:20 PM
this feels like clumsily-aimed cruelty. perhaps you will say it is brutal honesty, with a modicum of compassion. but i don't feel it. it is outside of you, and you are trying too hard to get in. false.
Re: Papa Smurf by Bachus	20-Nov-02/8:28 PM
because he can't get his hand away. it's glued firmly in place. that's why.
Re: Going to River Phoenix in my mind by horus8	20-Nov-02/8:45 PM
three nice things i have to say about this rewrite: cleaner. faster. stronger. have a blow job. on me.