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The Sea (Free verse) by Moss
Hours pass alone with the rocks, and I cover their faces with water. So many shades of black slip through my fingers unharmed. When will you notice the sea edge is lit like a ghost, and you hold my fingers too tight to be clean? The barnacles excite me, falling into my touch like white flakes of dust. I try to wash off your skin with my mouth, but you sit still assaulting my hair with your hands like the wind.

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Weighted score: 6.1666665
Overall Rank: 1025
Posted: November 19, 2002 11:32 PM PST; Last modified: November 19, 2002 11:32 PM PST
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[7] vulcan @ 80.242.3.101 | 20-Nov-02/1:00 AM | Reply
tender!7
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.245.180 | 20-Nov-02/5:29 AM | Reply
You, Sir, are not alone: I also find barnacles exciting.

Cupcake?
[10] <~> @ 167.206.181.179 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 20-Nov-02/7:59 AM | Reply
i'll have one, thank you very much. do you have any with kelp frosting?
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.245.180 > <~> | 20-Nov-02/11:48 AM | Reply
you can't have any cupcakes.
[10] <~> @ 167.206.181.179 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 20-Nov-02/12:07 PM | Reply
scrooge. ur mean
[8] razorgrin @ 192.197.142.104 | 20-Nov-02/7:02 AM | Reply
I'm liking the bit about the barnacles.
[10] <~> @ 167.206.181.179 | 20-Nov-02/7:54 AM | Reply
ooohhh. yesss. well done. have a ten, for your insight.
[8] god'swife @ 209.178.176.169 | 20-Nov-02/8:11 AM | Reply
Perfect ending. "to tight to be clean" is obscure.
[10] <~> @ 167.206.181.179 > god'swife | 20-Nov-02/8:13 AM | Reply
yes. give me something more, moss.
[n/a] UnityMitford @ 167.206.181.179 | 20-Nov-02/8:56 AM | Reply
i hate to dissent, but if i have to read one more goddamn poem about the sea, i might have to kill a kitten on my way home from rehab tonight.
[8] god'swife @ 209.178.176.169 > UnityMitford | 20-Nov-02/8:58 AM | Reply
I don't think is poem is actually about the sea.
[n/a] UnityMitford @ 167.206.181.179 > god'swife | 20-Nov-02/9:00 AM | Reply
readint too deeply into is is going to bore me. can you enlighten me?
[n/a] UnityMitford @ 167.206.181.179 > UnityMitford | 20-Nov-02/9:02 AM | Reply
although, reading it again, i see that there's more than i thought the first time. now i feel like it's a poem that is awash in patricia highsmith imagery, and it's starting to sink in.
[8] god'swife @ 209.178.176.169 > UnityMitford | 20-Nov-02/9:03 AM | Reply
No I can't. But I can say there are some fresh images here, and it's spare which I like.

[8] anitawit @ 203.197.210.154 | 22-Nov-02/11:13 AM | Reply
Liked the last stanza
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