| Re: There is no Happy Hour in Bakersfield, Ca. by horus8 |
3-Dec-02/8:43 AM |
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3-Dec-02/8:49 AM |
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| Re: HATTIE by Nicholas Monson |
3-Dec-02/10:16 AM |
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| Re: Beliefs? by RWAndersen |
3-Dec-02/10:18 AM |
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| Re: Superhuman - Nature - Hero by royalflesh |
3-Dec-02/10:34 AM |
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please fix the ???'s. and pick me up at 7. eight's too long a wait, love.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
3-Dec-02/10:37 AM |
much, much better now.
i still wonder why you use so.many.periods.?
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3-Dec-02/12:44 PM |
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| Re: she said by Bill Z Bub |
3-Dec-02/11:24 PM |
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i like it. i like the title, although if you must change it, i suggest "she said".
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| Re: The futillity of charity. by darby pyn |
3-Dec-02/11:26 PM |
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but this is not tailored. nor is it off the rack. this is a find. show it off.
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| Re: Where Beauty Goes by jhackman |
3-Dec-02/11:48 PM |
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hold a rose while you may. the memory damns me.
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| Re: Allegheny Winter Lament by jdsnyd |
3-Dec-02/11:49 PM |
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why so unsettled? why the jags? winter smoothes, buries all in its bitter greyed skin.
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| Re: Rich and the wall by INTRANSIT |
3-Dec-02/11:49 PM |
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watch out for spiders. their bites do itch.
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| Re: the rose by keatsImnot |
4-Dec-02/8:04 AM |
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4-Dec-02/9:24 AM |
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4-Dec-02/10:30 PM |
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4-Dec-02/10:33 PM |
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i like the way i feel like a voyeur watching them, and then they are the true voyeurs. but this needs more knitting, more flesh, if only to be later denied.
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4-Dec-02/10:35 PM |
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unfortunate, the conflict of bellowing and whispering. the connotation makes her seem insane, when she is mad with grief. you do not convince me of anything here. sorry.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
4-Dec-02/10:38 PM |
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there are too many sounds here, without a flow. love is hardly ever staccato, and loss is never so. match the tone of the words to the jist of the message. you are at odds with yourself in here. you have re-written this several times already haven't you?
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
4-Dec-02/10:41 PM |
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tell me the first stanza in different words?
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| Re: The Rebel by Nicholas Jones |
4-Dec-02/10:48 PM |
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can i milk her while she watches you write?
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