Re: a light in your eyes by crin	6-Dec-02/10:58 AM
nice.
Re: Fetish. by Plasticgirlwithgun	6-Dec-02/10:10 PM
wait a minute. i didn't know platic bled, plastic girl! are you transforming into metal'n'plastic girl?
Re: Space Age Bun Rigidifier by Quarton	6-Dec-02/10:25 PM
amusing, but could you condense? why does it need to go on so? i don't think it does. you whipt those words into shape in your other works; put down the cat and HONE!
Re: Happy Cancer! by Agemo-Z	6-Dec-02/10:32 PM
wow. that's some a-1 berating. success! go on, quit now while you're at the top of your game, genius. have some ballast. love, z
regarding some deleted poem...	6-Dec-02/11:46 PM
a few suggestions: i think you were trying to make the words lap, as waves, by using all those commas. what happens instead is that thoughts bleed into one another, un-detectable from each other, and the wash of words turns this slate to mud. so, give me a few solid thought fragments, then lace them together. see what i mean? also, "emperor" is spelt wrong. lovely imagery overall, but it makes me wish desperately that i knew what you were saying! this one is worth the work.
Re: Until by lunar	8-Dec-02/2:19 PM
and maybe never will. just because you have much to offer doesn't mean the other needs or wants it. sorry.
regarding some deleted poem...	9-Dec-02/10:57 AM
the snow angels, after the hot tub, the night stu broke his foot jumping into the pond because he couldn't see the rocks through the skin of ice? those snow angels? was it YOU who poured all the beer into the hot tub, then??? well? was it? FESS UP, DAMN YOU!!!!
Re: Walter Cronkite by UnityMitford	9-Dec-02/11:10 AM
no swastikas for you!!!!
Re: triple suicide server line by Bill Z Bub	9-Dec-02/11:13 AM
and blame it on your meds. well done, sirrah.
Re: And uncle sam says... by INTRANSIT	9-Dec-02/11:15 AM
apparently, whether you voted or not does not matter. bully for you for giving it the old democratic try, thopugh...
Re: Panning for gold by INTRANSIT	9-Dec-02/11:18 AM
maybe it was false teeth, slipping the cogs.
Re: missing time by Bill Z Bub	9-Dec-02/11:24 AM
this is beautiful. i wasn't sure about the buttercup line, but, by god, it cinches it. you have skills. mad skills.
regarding some deleted poem...	9-Dec-02/11:25 AM
dis is funny. not 'funny how', like spider, but funny in the best of all possible ways.
regarding some deleted poem...	9-Dec-02/2:20 PM
okay, i slacked. sorry. here's my thoughts: delete all commas. this line, --They are foreigners here. Obligedly brown and silent.-- i would change to: -Foreigners here, they oblige, ever brown and silent.- and this, to -A pale woman on her knees, I seem out of place pulling weeds by hand.- -In Belgrano, the Ghost Train rattles by. Commuters head out to the city, worthy and unconcerned with us others, working uncovered, They ignore the scavengers with their steel-frame contraptions- new stanza: -Yesterday at the grocery store I wondered whether or not I had the nerve to hide a three pound roast in my purse. I too am out of "respectable" work.- i think you need to accentuate the word 'respectable,' because poetry and gardening are respectable, more so than soul-selling for six figures. can you imagine landing that kind of cash? at my job, i am amazed at those who make 10x my salary--they have a specific vein of expertise that is currently valued highly. they have trouble opening and printing documents; apparently, they are too 'respectable' to be bothered learning those skills. of course, there are exceptions, as everywhere in life. did you take the roast?
Re: Jacaranda by David	9-Dec-02/2:25 PM
smile. ah. yes.
Re: Jacaranda by David	9-Dec-02/2:25 PM
mute statue?
Re: International Economic and Social Cooperation by David	9-Dec-02/2:29 PM
can one eat papadum with mexican food? the slasa's all wrong, i know... okay, throw in some onion, mint, and tamarind chutneys for appetizers, and i hope you brought the fixings for hot fudge sundaes!
Re: Osmosis on Parade by David	9-Dec-02/2:30 PM
interview well, do we. excellent.
Re: Dear Mr. Poetry, could you hold my purse? <how does babbit do it> by horus8	9-Dec-02/8:08 PM
what's with all the vinegar, h?
regarding some deleted poem...	9-Dec-02/8:50 PM
how about "W.W.M.D.?" (what would mcguyver do?)