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Allegheny Winter Lament

Member since 2002 · Posted 3 Dec 2002 · 5 comments

Allegheny's docile rolling hills are cloaked in December's ruse. An endless pallid landscape looms from this once grassy dale, wistful for the geniality of summer. Glacial winds churn the unsullied snowfall, biting boldly exposed skin. Cautious, watering eyes peer laboriously through narrow slits at the bones of winter. The point where earth meets the sky, indistinct. Windswept snow and forest seized in the balance. Barren forsaken trees reach for the heavens, bewildered by their futility. Designated nature's redundant, derelict relatives, abandoned to sustain ourselves. Paradise has migrated and we are once again , the bastards of creation.

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[n/a] Bill Z Bub 3-Dec-02/10:31 PM Reply
For some reason, I love the last line.
"the bastards of creation"
some good stuff here.
[n/a] <~> 3-Dec-02/11:49 PM Reply
why so unsettled? why the jags? winter smoothes, buries all in its bitter greyed skin.
[8] Caducus 4-Dec-02/1:44 AM Reply
Learned the art of description in this, its given me an idea for somthing =8= nice one jd
[n/a] jdsnyd › Caducus 6-Dec-02/10:13 AM Reply
Thanks for the all the comments, I agree Z, this is just another aspect of it.
[9] god'swife 6-Dec-02/11:33 AM Reply
Very fine. I have no winter here. Winter only means paper whites instead of black-eyed susans.