Re: Forever by Felzpoet	25-May-03/7:34 PM
Hey, I understand that you're just trying to make things rhyme, but "Never out will my love for you run"? Come on, that one HURTS. As Churchill would say, it's "an outrage up with which I will not put." Rule of thumb: If you have to mangle your syntax beyond recognition, the rhyme isn't worth it.
Re: a comment on Love by simone_girard	25-May-03/7:18 PM
It should also be noted that, even when viewed as a non-sonnet, this poem is absolutely wretched.
Re: a comment on Love by simone_girard	25-May-03/7:16 PM
There are three traditional styles of sonnet: English, or Shakespearean; Italian, or Petrarchan; and Russian, or Onegin. The distinguishing feature of each is the rhyme scheme. English: ABAB CDCD EFEF GG Italian: ABBA ABBA CDECDE (sometimes CDEEDC) Russian: ABAB CCDD EFFEGG Note that these are all fourteen-line poems, while "Love" has eighteen. It doesn't come anywhere close to being a sonnet, of any kind.
Re: Theology by dougsoderstrom	23-May-03/2:11 PM
Stop telling everyone, everywhere, to read this. It's atrociously bad.
Re: Love Squirts by wFraser Allonby Q.C.w	20-May-03/3:07 PM
Thank you for sharing. It's this kind of frank, open dicussion of pressing issues that this country needs more of.
Re: i cant' let him go by roses are red	6-Apr-03/11:58 PM
Dude, no.
Re: hard as a rock by <~>	6-Apr-03/11:17 PM
Best vilanelle I've seen on this site to date. As in the greats--"Do Not Go Gentle Into That Good Night" being the example that leaps foremost to mind--you make the structure feel natural and sensible instead of painfully forced. That isn't easy to do. That being said, I do have a small complaint. In the final two stanzas, the second line in each breaks from the established rhythm. "Parry" and "weary" are both stressed on the penultimate syllable, whereas every other line in the poem is stressed on the final syllable. Read it aloud; you'll hear it. Other than that, wonderful, wonderful.
Re: selfish by <~>	6-Apr-03/10:40 PM
S'good. I like it. Most people come across as pretentious or psuedo-intellectual when they use words like "miasma," but you manage to make it work, and I have to respect that.
Re: a comment on A Sepcial Someone by JustLin	1-Apr-03/11:21 AM
No, you can't. But now I'd really like to see a chessy greeting card--what exactly would that be?
Re: a comment on Worst Haiku Ever by maffy	1-Apr-03/11:14 AM
I beg to differ. I don't think you can be the worst haiku ever if you aren't actually a haiku. Now, Christof's attempt, while it DOES have the correct syllabification, is just too damn fun to say for it to be the worst ever.
Re: Dance With Me by marvelis	1-Apr-03/10:57 AM
I'm sorry, this is painfully bad.
Re: Is This Love by intheailse	29-Mar-03/8:44 AM
Did you just try to rhyme "fire" with "time"? Good Lord. The only thing worse than a poem that insists on rhyming is a poem that insists on rhyming and fails.