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selfish (Free verse) by <~> When I drew a line
around what was mine
the way you had always done
when we were kids--
like when we'd fight
over the joystick
and play space invaders
up past our bedtime
with no understanding
of the miasma of metaphors
we were winding, binding, hiding
in our seething ids--
and you,
you never would
let me win.
Once
I drew that line,
I didn't want
any of it,
only you.
Up the ladder:
To Me
Down the ladder:
All night
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Posted: April 6, 2003 8:37 PM PDT; Last modified: April 6, 2003 8:37 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.6531434 Overall Rank: 2092 Comments:
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-=SeTTle=- @ 68.14.26.239
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6-Apr-03/9:19 PM
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Dude if your brother used you as a fucktoy this isn't the place to tell the world. It's best to keep these things secret and to ourselves. The shame is yours and yours alone. Liked 3rd stanza best.
S'good. I like it. Most people come across as pretentious or psuedo-intellectual when they use words like "miasma," but you manage to make it work, and I have to respect that.
Please get a life or a sugardaddy to bang u slut....
And to think my brother's band is named 'Simple Man'!#! Dear ASM, please feel free to follow your own advice.
Its hightime u followed my advice too before u end up writing crappy poems like the above. By the way most of the poets u like suck anyway.......ever heard of Ted Hughes,John Keats.......
Dude, you're so much of a wiener all I can do is laugh.'U' are a sad little boy.
thats funny coming from a shithead like u......hahaha
oh dear gawd no! The illiterate twerp is trying to really uncreatively insult me! Whatever shall I do? Look Chuckles, 'm better at this than you, so don't try. I've seen many a teenybopper flamer like yourself attempt to out-heckle me and they all failed. In short, your kung fu is nothing compared to mine, so give up. Get a hobby, go outside and play, jerk off to avril lavigne, just wait until you're a little older and better armed before you get into verbal sparring matches. Hugs 'n' kisses!
A joystick isn't really something you should be fighting over. Although strong like a horse's leg, it can be also delicate, like a flower wrapped in silk. 8.
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